My Vanity (partial)

Such an honest reflection of feelings. Though I can not agree with part of it, I do believe you have every right to think and feel about yourself as you see fit.  
Personally, I believe vanity as well as ego is a human curse, born of our perceived need for acceptance or to please ourselves.
I also think if humans spent more time attempting to help others without regard to our own wishes, we'd find these feelings wiould lessen as a result.  

All in all, I felt the poem was well written and the rhyme and rhythm flowed well.

Keep up the good work, poetess.

*The RL is intended for the honesty of the piece as well as the presentation.

Thank you, this is just a part of the full piece... I wrote this a longggg time ago (10 years) and have grown out of that stage for the most part but this was a big part of my life for many many years and still something I have to reflect back on when I’m feeling down on myself. You said there were parts you might change... could you be more specific?

Hi
Delighted to see you're going to hang around.

Well, I was referring to the person feeling inadequate or undeserving simply due to their appearance, not the construction of the write.

However since you've inquired, I've put together something for you to think about. As always it is nothing more than my thoughts. It should be up to the poet/writer as to whether it improves the piece in their eyes.


... This blaming game is my protection
glazing over my reflection                            *glazing or gazing
when the cause to my demise        
was not the mirror but "in" my eyes.

I’ll admit, I think I’m sick.               *here you could change one of the
And don't want to get better         "and(s)" to alleviate the repetition.
This bitch will be the death of me     possibly: ("though" in place of
And I am going to let her                    the first or "yet" in place of
                                                                either.

Couldn’t stand a single pound
be added to the frame
Would sooner eat my finger
then tell her she’s to blame..                   *Do you mean "than"

*I took the liberty of breaking this down into stanzas for ease of reading, separating different thoughts and toying with the flow.

Thanks for sharing such personal thoughts. Enjoyed the message and the rhyme.

:)