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Inner Voice (Positive)
An angel appeared to me in a dream
And in the prose of my inner voice
She told me to follow him, my destiny
So faith became my compass
And the darkness faded away
The radiance of light suddenly
appeared to me
You appeared like a gift
Like a conductor of her grace
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love, my life
But I pray to you - don't let me
lose her guidance and direction
You are my destiny
Dreams chart a course in the stars
I surrender my will, into a
beautiful captivity
My soul split, half is yours
Binding me in this love
And in return I have
the will to live in an otherwise
cruel and punishing world
When your love burst into my life
A graceful antidote for my sadness
The sweetest mead, elixir of love
you are the muse of my bright notes
Precious treasure, the secret of
my destiny, the only plan I need
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love fulfilled
You are my destiny, my life
And in the prose of my inner voice
She told me to follow him, my destiny
So faith became my compass
And the darkness faded away
The radiance of light suddenly
appeared to me
You appeared like a gift
Like a conductor of her grace
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love, my life
But I pray to you - don't let me
lose her guidance and direction
You are my destiny
Dreams chart a course in the stars
I surrender my will, into a
beautiful captivity
My soul split, half is yours
Binding me in this love
And in return I have
the will to live in an otherwise
cruel and punishing world
When your love burst into my life
A graceful antidote for my sadness
The sweetest mead, elixir of love
you are the muse of my bright notes
Precious treasure, the secret of
my destiny, the only plan I need
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love fulfilled
You are my destiny, my life
Published 13th Aug 2020
Author's Note
There is also a negative version I will probably post.
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13th Aug 2020 10:54pm
Bravissima, benim cesur şairim❣❣ You capture so much romance in this piece. This is a beautiful passage,
"You appeared like a gift
Like a conductor of her grace"
And this is positively Shakespearean Sonnet-like,
"The sweetest mead, elixir of love
you are the muse of my bright notes "
And for me there is no greater aim for love than to,
"...have
the will to live in an otherwise
cruel and punishing world"
"You appeared like a gift
Like a conductor of her grace"
And this is positively Shakespearean Sonnet-like,
"The sweetest mead, elixir of love
you are the muse of my bright notes "
And for me there is no greater aim for love than to,
"...have
the will to live in an otherwise
cruel and punishing world"
You give me to much credit - hiç de cesur değil❣❣ Thank you for the beautiful comment and compliment. :) 💖
14th Aug 2020 1:35am
Gerçekten cesur ve alçakgönüllü bir şair gibi konuştun❣❣ My pleasure.
13th Aug 2020 11:25pm
YES! You are a poet. This amazing poem proves it. Wow! Thanks for sharing. Peace.oral
14th Aug 2020 00:23am
Thank you so much for the beautiful comment and compliment Oralizer. I am really glad you liked it. 💖
14th Aug 2020 4:21am
Dear K,
A very sweet and contemplative piece. Half prayer, half sonnet a true pleasure to enjoy. That thanks given for being the chosen one to be loved by that particular someone and not wanting to lose your sense of self, this what this meant for me. Its always a pleasure to read a positive outcome within a lovely write. H🌷
A very sweet and contemplative piece. Half prayer, half sonnet a true pleasure to enjoy. That thanks given for being the chosen one to be loved by that particular someone and not wanting to lose your sense of self, this what this meant for me. Its always a pleasure to read a positive outcome within a lovely write. H🌷
14th Aug 2020 9:16pm
Thanks for the beautiful comment H, I am really glad you enjoyed it and as usual you definitely understand me. 💖
14th Aug 2020 4:54am
Just WOW Kristina
This is truly lovely and was a jot to read
Thank you for sharing
This is truly lovely and was a jot to read
Thank you for sharing
14th Aug 2020 9:17pm
Thanks Swagger, I really love seeing WOW in a comment and I am really happy you liked enjoyed it. :) 💖
Hi, Kris
This is another of your treatises whose nuanced expressions reveal the depths of your romantic soul.
The continuum from dream to wide-awake experience is testament to a longing fulfilled. Your subtle progression from one level to the next in stanzas 3 and 6 creates an antiphony that defines, binds, and unifies the range of emotions that occupies your heart. The pendulum swings on your vocabulary: antidote, hope, love, life, destiny.
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love, my life
You are my destiny
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love fulfilled
You are my destiny, my life
I see significant shades of meaning in the exchange from love into life into destiny (in stanza 3), as opposed to love into destiny into life (in stanza 6). If that was deliberate, how do you compare life with destiny? Which is the servant of the other?
Sincerely
cab
This is another of your treatises whose nuanced expressions reveal the depths of your romantic soul.
The continuum from dream to wide-awake experience is testament to a longing fulfilled. Your subtle progression from one level to the next in stanzas 3 and 6 creates an antiphony that defines, binds, and unifies the range of emotions that occupies your heart. The pendulum swings on your vocabulary: antidote, hope, love, life, destiny.
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love, my life
You are my destiny
Darling, you're my antidote
Melt me in your arms
My hope for love fulfilled
You are my destiny, my life
I see significant shades of meaning in the exchange from love into life into destiny (in stanza 3), as opposed to love into destiny into life (in stanza 6). If that was deliberate, how do you compare life with destiny? Which is the servant of the other?
Sincerely
cab
14th Aug 2020 9:20pm
Cab, I always look forward to your insightful and philosophical comments because you are able to break things down in such a methodical way - surgically finding the true meanings. It is a quandary seeking out my destiny first but in doing so my destiny becomes my life so yes it was intentional. :) 💖
15th Aug 2020 8:14pm
Agree with Gadhess and Cab. I was most moved by, And faith became my compass. The intimate voice is rendered with a softly expansive mien, like fingers rippling waters, this message in a bottle.
15th Aug 2020 10:17pm
I really love this comment also, your interpretation is brilliantly worded and really speaks to me. :) 💖
1st Sep 2020 00:54am
Kristina, I really liked and enjoyed this. It truly speaks of the emotional attachment we feel and try to put in words. Now I'm also interested to read the other one you mentioned in your note and seeing the contrast.
Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for sharing.
1st Sep 2020 9:22pm
Thanks wallyroo, I am glad you liked it. The other one may have a little to much contrast as I think it was less understood or well received but it's there. :)
