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Shivers
this time
it was I
who got away
my turn
to spurn
a love
and say goodbye
it doesn't
sit any better
knowing it's
someone else
who gets hurt
for a change
their heart
churning, burning
yearning for
a reconciliation
which is worse?
to love and lose
or be the one
who turns love down
which is worse
I want to know
either way
I can not say
love to me
is but a curse
that sends
a shiver
or something worse
down my spine
then into verse
it was I
who got away
my turn
to spurn
a love
and say goodbye
it doesn't
sit any better
knowing it's
someone else
who gets hurt
for a change
their heart
churning, burning
yearning for
a reconciliation
which is worse?
to love and lose
or be the one
who turns love down
which is worse
I want to know
either way
I can not say
love to me
is but a curse
that sends
a shiver
or something worse
down my spine
then into verse
Author's Note
What's love got to do with it?
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Re. Shivers
29th Jul 2020 1:01pm
This said it all line by line and the author notes speaks volumes of truth for what's love got to do with it for at the end of the day we are still alone without clarity on there part of why🤔 nicely done poetess..respect
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Re. Shivers
29th Jul 2020 1:04pm
Many thanks for your lovely comments! They are very much appreciated, dear poet!
Re. Shivers
29th Jul 2020 2:00pm
This is excellent ... the crisp lines ... sustains the flow ... the aching message ... the questioning ... the last line ... all of it ...
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29th Jul 2020 10:46pm
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Anonymous
29th Jul 2020 3:31pm
Pain, confusion, angst, questioning.
Etc....
Some of my most driving emotions that inspire me too
I love your honest simplicity. I wish I was able to be so succinct.
Your rhyming game was on point as well. Terrific.
Thank you for sharing
Well done you
💜
Etc....
Some of my most driving emotions that inspire me too
I love your honest simplicity. I wish I was able to be so succinct.
Your rhyming game was on point as well. Terrific.
Thank you for sharing
Well done you
💜
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Re: Re. Shivers
29th Jul 2020 10:49pm
Thank you so much for reading and responding to my poem. I'm honored by your comments!
Re. Shivers
29th Jul 2020 4:32pm
So well stated
Both scenarios suck
You get over dumping someone faster so I’d go with that .....
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Both scenarios suck
You get over dumping someone faster so I’d go with that .....
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29th Jul 2020 10:51pm
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Re. Shivers
30th Jul 2020 6:11am
Heartbreak takes time to heal. Watch the move What's Love Got To Do It, which is what you said in author notes. Keep on writing.
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Re. Shivers
1st Aug 2020 10:36am
Life is about a connection to something. If it’s not love it’s material. If it’s material it will eventually vanish. Love is in the soul that is with you always. Great write!
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Re: Re. Shivers
1st Aug 2020 11:03am
Thank you for reading and responding to my poem. Your comments are very much appreciated 😊
Re. Shivers
18th Sep 2020 6:31pm
Never easy either to ''fall'' in love or get out of a rship. You play and assume.........or you stay in your corner.
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18th Sep 2020 11:23pm