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Dusk in the Desert
I swear, this summer’s sun
still scorches close to night
as I must have been the wettest there
returning home from my desert hike!
Got to take photos of desert fare;
saw a monster, orange and black
looked no worse for wear
nor thirsty for a damp redact!
Getting difficult now for me to see
few streetlamps light my way
relying on starlight skies for me
‘fore denizens emerge to play.
Published 2nd Jul 2020
Author's Note
Inspired by the poem:
Afternoon on a Hill
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/browse?contentId=13808
For the Classic Corner challenge
"I know the Face of Falsehood and Her Tongue"
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11480/
Afternoon on a Hill
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/browse?contentId=13808
For the Classic Corner challenge
"I know the Face of Falsehood and Her Tongue"
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11480/
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2nd Jul 2020 7:29pm
Love how you've applied this to your personal experience of living in the desert, Tallen. Also how you extended it from Millay's imagery to the evening walk homeward. Solid imagery and the essence of reveling in nature without disturbing it is palpable.
2nd Jul 2020 7:58pm
i believe this is my first
entering one of Yours and JB's comps about OUR favorite authors?
& Yeah, You guys are awesome and not just because You did more than just one of my favorite authors!!
Super appreciate of the PM's of critique and suggestions and read and comment, here.
& surprised but no less Honored for the RL add
entering one of Yours and JB's comps about OUR favorite authors?
& Yeah, You guys are awesome and not just because You did more than just one of my favorite authors!!
Super appreciate of the PM's of critique and suggestions and read and comment, here.
& surprised but no less Honored for the RL add
2nd Jul 2020 9:24pm
Oooo ... Poetry Foundation ... I love that site ... nice poeting Tallen ...
2nd Jul 2020 9:58pm
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2nd Jul 2020 9:25pm
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2nd Jul 2020 10:00pm
i still have a photo of one of the beautiful desert reptiles but was not certain if allow to post within the rules of the comp
always delighted when You read my spills and delighted
Honored for the RL add
always delighted when You read my spills and delighted
Honored for the RL add
3rd Jul 2020 3:16am
Dear T,
Wonderful! I really enjoyed the mix of real life and a bit of other worldly. The very best of luck in the comp. Well done. H🌷
Wonderful! I really enjoyed the mix of real life and a bit of other worldly. The very best of luck in the comp. Well done. H🌷
3rd Jul 2020 6:05am
thank You for the read and kind share
and thank You for the well wish
this is my first entering one of Ahavati and JB's
author comps
Honored for the RL add
and thank You for the well wish
this is my first entering one of Ahavati and JB's
author comps
Honored for the RL add
3rd Jul 2020 2:04pm
That’s awesome! You are going to rock this comp! Well done and again sending best of luck, you don’t need it because this is a shoe-in. X H🌷
3rd Jul 2020 3:29pm
The desert is a wondrous site as very often see more of what is in than what is out.
3rd Jul 2020 4:13pm
i always get excited when i come across
Desert Life in movement.....
the many varieties of insects
the Tortoises, scorpions, woolly tarantulas (always tempted to take one home)
the Gilas ...........
These small beasties are often missed by the passing eye of many a hiker.
Desert Life in movement.....
the many varieties of insects
the Tortoises, scorpions, woolly tarantulas (always tempted to take one home)
the Gilas ...........
These small beasties are often missed by the passing eye of many a hiker.
3rd Jul 2020 8:05pm
I really enjoyed this Tallen very much so. I was really 'there' within the poem.
I will be checking Millay out. I have feeling I will like her work.
Thanks for sharing.
I will be checking Millay out. I have feeling I will like her work.
Thanks for sharing.
3rd Jul 2020 8:29pm
unexpected - You RL-ing, let alone making attentive note to my spill, here -- am Honored and surprised --
thank You
thank You
3rd Jul 2020 8:33pm
Reading this over again and felt compelled to comment :)
This is a wonderful "rendition" if you will. The succinct desert imagery on the walk home, combined with the beautiful meter really takes the reader to a special place. You captured a spirit of wonderment with this one. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem, Tallen, and best of luck in the comp :)
This is a wonderful "rendition" if you will. The succinct desert imagery on the walk home, combined with the beautiful meter really takes the reader to a special place. You captured a spirit of wonderment with this one. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem, Tallen, and best of luck in the comp :)
3rd Jul 2020 9:47pm
You wow me over with Your reread share. . .
Your comment causes ME TO REread!!
thank You for the reread and wonderful read-felt share
Honored for the RL add
Your comment causes ME TO REread!!
thank You for the reread and wonderful read-felt share
Honored for the RL add
23rd Sep 2020 6:30pm
You're most welcome, Tallen. Back again... Patiently awaiting more of your writing 🙏
3rd Jul 2020 11:21pm
She is
the best thing ever!!
i am delighted You are gonna get acquainted with her work!!
the best thing ever!!
i am delighted You are gonna get acquainted with her work!!
Anonymous
4th Jul 2020 11:11am
Excellent job, Tallen. "Afternoon On A Hill" was about being an observer, taking everything in through the physical senses, but without disturbing it. You owned it with a your own personal vantage point. Good luck in the challenge!
4th Jul 2020 3:05pm
Edna often spills
stuff i WISH i had spilled.
appreciate Your share and kind praise
Honored for the RL add
stuff i WISH i had spilled.
appreciate Your share and kind praise
Honored for the RL add
2nd Aug 2020 1:55pm
Lovely read and phenomenal imagery! Enjoyed going on this virtual stroll with you! Thank you for taking us along with you
2nd Aug 2020 7:01pm
This was my 1st in trying to emulate a Poet
in the comp
and all i could think of was animals and stuff i see here in southern AZ.
appreciate the kind comments
in the comp
and all i could think of was animals and stuff i see here in southern AZ.
appreciate the kind comments
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19th Sep 2020 5:50pm
very playful, full of vividness like after voyages or exotic experiences. :)
19th Sep 2020 6:48pm
You caused me to smile with Your read and comment
thank You (i was in need of a smile for a while )
thank You (i was in need of a smile for a while )
