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Dusk
The crying 'caaw' echoes in the cool breeze...
as it wearily takes flight
far away into the dusky sky
Gentle whispers wonder through the trees
as they arch and bow
I move to their hum
Soothingly and innocently
the soft caresses strengthen me
I am wooed by this smooth golden masterpiece
standing before me with solemn dignity
showing off it's uncomparable beauty
and onwards the faithful river flows
winding its way with me
reliably, meaningfully, eternally
while the water glistens
with truth and honesty
as it wearily takes flight
far away into the dusky sky
Gentle whispers wonder through the trees
as they arch and bow
I move to their hum
Soothingly and innocently
the soft caresses strengthen me
I am wooed by this smooth golden masterpiece
standing before me with solemn dignity
showing off it's uncomparable beauty
and onwards the faithful river flows
winding its way with me
reliably, meaningfully, eternally
while the water glistens
with truth and honesty
Published 28th Jun 2020
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28th Jun 2020 1:40am
28th Jun 2020 1:54am
28th Jun 2020 2:02am
28th Jun 2020 1:54am
Nicely Phrased , Phased , And So Appraised ,
And In Structure , No Rupture , Well Mazed ,
Leaving Some , Where They Comin' From
Just A Bit Dazed , Fazed , Just A Little Bit Numb ,
You Got The Words...You Just Using Some !
And In Structure , No Rupture , Well Mazed ,
Leaving Some , Where They Comin' From
Just A Bit Dazed , Fazed , Just A Little Bit Numb ,
You Got The Words...You Just Using Some !
28th Jun 2020 2:01am
28th Jun 2020 2:15am
Because they might not understand your depth ,
within the words on the page , nor engage , in
the immensity of the density , of your feeling ,
in written form appealing to the intensity Of Being ,
the seeing beyond the form encased at some base
level , for you are beyond that state , and I can relate !
within the words on the page , nor engage , in
the immensity of the density , of your feeling ,
in written form appealing to the intensity Of Being ,
the seeing beyond the form encased at some base
level , for you are beyond that state , and I can relate !
28th Jun 2020 2:32am
hullo and welcome
entirely decent offering, good person
you captured the moments well, from the c,aaw to the whispers through the trees, the woo, and the gentle river. good stuff there. was in two minds with 'wearily takes flight' bugged me a little but I made peace with it, haha. wondered if you'd meant wandered through trees
good stuff, shine on
entirely decent offering, good person
you captured the moments well, from the c,aaw to the whispers through the trees, the woo, and the gentle river. good stuff there. was in two minds with 'wearily takes flight' bugged me a little but I made peace with it, haha. wondered if you'd meant wandered through trees
good stuff, shine on
28th Jun 2020 2:55am
28th Jun 2020 7:11am
28th Jun 2020 7:45am
28th Jun 2020 8:24am
What a beautiful poem, oh to awaken to such a beautiful sight. Great work,
28th Jun 2020 9:15am
28th Jun 2020 5:31pm
Us creatures of the night shun the day and wait in the shadows for the subtle beauty of the setting sun. As mortals worship the sunrise, we awaken by the call of Dusk when the world becomes ours and the sleepless become our pleasures.
XXX
XXX
28th Jun 2020 6:41pm
I have become a creature of the night this week. There's something very welcoming about an evening walk when everything becomes quieter and calmer x
28th Jun 2020 7:57pm
Welcome to the kingdom of midnight where the seven deadly sins are the laws we un-live by. I am Lord Stabdagger, thy humble servant, and Alpha of the greatest pack of Werewolves in the western world.
A pleasure to make thy acquaintance my Lady. XXX
A pleasure to make thy acquaintance my Lady. XXX
29th Jun 2020 4:30pm
It's an honor to make my acquaintance with you, Lord Stabdagger, the mightiest Werewolf in this foreboding world. I am the darkest princess of the night and I roam this sacred land of ours by the moonlight.
4th Jul 2020 7:07pm
I found this serene and melancholic but I fear the river water runs deep with hidden things beneath its surface. A good spill of ink bawaga enjoying your writing
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