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“For it had been better for them not to have known the way of
righteousness, than, after they have known it, to turn from the holy
commandment delivered unto them.” 2 Peter 221 (KJV)
hide your head
just like the ostrich?
smile instead,
while thinking “that bitch”?
change your seat,
remain complacent,
while the heat
flames on adjacent?
not enough
to be unracist!
call my bluff:
be anti-racist!
passive good
does not much goodness,
while the hood
explodes unbloodless!
inertia
assumes no passion;
conferva
no fame or fashion.
join the cause,
not by abstention;
change hate laws
by intervention.
© Copyright 2020 June 11
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
righteousness, than, after they have known it, to turn from the holy
commandment delivered unto them.” 2 Peter 221 (KJV)
hide your head
just like the ostrich?
smile instead,
while thinking “that bitch”?
change your seat,
remain complacent,
while the heat
flames on adjacent?
not enough
to be unracist!
call my bluff:
be anti-racist!
passive good
does not much goodness,
while the hood
explodes unbloodless!
inertia
assumes no passion;
conferva
no fame or fashion.
join the cause,
not by abstention;
change hate laws
by intervention.
© Copyright 2020 June 11
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 11th Jun 2020
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11th Jun 2020 10:23pm
12th Jun 2020 2:52am
Thank you, LadyLove.
I appreciate your stopping by, reading, and then taking the time to give encouraging feedback.
Sincerely
cab
I appreciate your stopping by, reading, and then taking the time to give encouraging feedback.
Sincerely
cab
13th Jun 2020 3:39am
Smooth, intellectual call to arms.. Spiritual,
Subject matter on point.
Concrete poetry blended in traditional structure.
Inspirational
nice
Respect
Subject matter on point.
Concrete poetry blended in traditional structure.
Inspirational
nice
Respect
14th Jun 2020 7:36am
My sincere thanks to you, OG, for some level of analysis!
Many visitors internalise their feelings under words such as "nice," "great," "good," but I see you have stopped to share your appreciation of structure, form, and tone.
That also speaks to your understanding of literary arts.
Sincerely
cab
Many visitors internalise their feelings under words such as "nice," "great," "good," but I see you have stopped to share your appreciation of structure, form, and tone.
That also speaks to your understanding of literary arts.
Sincerely
cab
15th Jun 2020 1:57am
I continue to study, please assist me in my ascertainment of your work..
Inform me of how close I may be, I need to know if I am reading the work correctly
Always respect
Inform me of how close I may be, I need to know if I am reading the work correctly
Always respect
Thank you for your sincerity, OG. Indeed, a person who claims to already know everything shuts down his chances of learning, but he who constantly inquires never ceases to learn.
Your "call to arms" is spot-on: it's a war against injustice and a search for rectitude. That's the general tone of the poem.
I suppose you say "intellectual," because of the choice of vocabulary and the weight of the language and literary perception? You would be right, because the meaning is accessible from a greater intellectual perspective than from an elementary knowledge of how to parse.
"Subject matter on point": Here, I could say, true, in the sense that in three breaths, the author (a) identifies the problem, (b) proposes a solution to the problem, and (c) proposes a method to the solution.
"Spiritual," yes, because morality is spirituality. As the Bible states, "Therefore to him that knoweth to do good, and doeth it not, to him it is sin" (James 4:17).
"Concrete...blended in traditional": Perfect observation again; the pleading, loving hands along with the linear configuration (line shape), give a strong visual image; but, of course, it is not a purely concrete or shape poem.
I would say, on the whole, an excellent analysis. You could challenge yourself by examining the metrical properties and rhyme scheme.
Yours sincerely
cab
Your "call to arms" is spot-on: it's a war against injustice and a search for rectitude. That's the general tone of the poem.
I suppose you say "intellectual," because of the choice of vocabulary and the weight of the language and literary perception? You would be right, because the meaning is accessible from a greater intellectual perspective than from an elementary knowledge of how to parse.
"Subject matter on point": Here, I could say, true, in the sense that in three breaths, the author (a) identifies the problem, (b) proposes a solution to the problem, and (c) proposes a method to the solution.
"Spiritual," yes, because morality is spirituality. As the Bible states, "Therefore to him that knoweth to do good, and doeth it not, to him it is sin" (James 4:17).
"Concrete...blended in traditional": Perfect observation again; the pleading, loving hands along with the linear configuration (line shape), give a strong visual image; but, of course, it is not a purely concrete or shape poem.
I would say, on the whole, an excellent analysis. You could challenge yourself by examining the metrical properties and rhyme scheme.
Yours sincerely
cab
