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Inhospitable Ordeal
Asleep with life’s love
eighty-seven-year cocoon
sounds warning bells of distress
snatched from safe bed-womb
into ambulance shoved
not yet scheduled for metamorphosis
Isolated from genuine affection
wearing only under garments
esteemed a new body for inspection
no sentient being but assignment
testing leads to pneumonia diagnosis
In foreign bed amid pool of masked strangers
lucid but confused too shy his needs to convey
Intimate voices comfort by too infrequent phone calls
true loves sole conduit to assuage dismay
only sleep stems anxieties psychosis.
eighty-seven-year cocoon
sounds warning bells of distress
snatched from safe bed-womb
into ambulance shoved
not yet scheduled for metamorphosis
Isolated from genuine affection
wearing only under garments
esteemed a new body for inspection
no sentient being but assignment
testing leads to pneumonia diagnosis
In foreign bed amid pool of masked strangers
lucid but confused too shy his needs to convey
Intimate voices comfort by too infrequent phone calls
true loves sole conduit to assuage dismay
only sleep stems anxieties psychosis.
Author's Note
Dad's in the hospital yearning for home and his beloved. Tough time to be in such a place. Thank God he tested negative for COVID-19. Excruciating for mom.
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Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
18th May 2020 9:48pm
GW, i'm so sorry that your dad is hospitalized but good to know he hasn't tested positive for the virus. Such a difficult time for everyone especially the ones that have to be in the hospital and their families. I hope he recovers and goes home soon. The best thing any one can do at a time like this is to stay positive. My thoughts and prayers for your family.
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Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
Thank you so much, Layla❣❣ He should be okay. I could hear the fear in his voice and it broke my heart.
Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
18th May 2020 10:15pm
I’m sorry to hear about your father, I understand how isolating and lonely the hospital feels during this time. I have spent time there myself. It’s also so hard for loved ones who are prohibited from visiting. You and your family are in my thoughts and prayers. Also, a beautiful poem!
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Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
18th May 2020 10:20pm
Thank you dear Julia❣❣ I am sorry you had to spend time there as well. My dad was just so confused.
Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
18th May 2020 10:50pm
Oh that’s just the worst. The confusion just breakns my heart. I was hospitalized once and the lady who shared the room with me had mild dementia. And when her family wasn’t there, she was so terrified by the nurses because she didn’t understand. Hopefully he returns home soon.
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19th May 2020 00:21am
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Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
19th May 2020 3:23am
Dear G,
Your piece is very thoughtful and raw. The situation is the absolute pits! I wish your dad a speedy recovery so he can go home asap. I echo all the well wishes and thoughts above. H🌷
Your piece is very thoughtful and raw. The situation is the absolute pits! I wish your dad a speedy recovery so he can go home asap. I echo all the well wishes and thoughts above. H🌷
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Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
19th May 2020 5:37pm
Thank you so much, Honoria. I appreciate your thoughts on the piece and your well-wishes for my dad.
Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
20th May 2020 11:54pm
Meaningful and sad poem. I also pray for your father's recovery and for your mom to have the strength she needs during these hard times. Try to keep your head up, I know how this must be affecting you as well.
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21st May 2020 3:00am
Thank you so much Kristina❣❣ Actually my dad went home today. Yeah what's hard for me is being in Texas while they live in my home base of N. California. I appreciate very much your prayers. 🙏
Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
26th May 2020 11:16pm
Goodness! This packs an emotional punch and your word choices are just spot on. Well done handling this delicate subject.
And I am terribly sorry about your dad.
And I am terribly sorry about your dad.
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Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
26th May 2020 11:25pm
Actually it's okay. He's home and on the mend. However, he is 87 and I should brace myself for that inevitability. I was listening to a series of mindfulness lectures and one presenter, actually Richard Carlson's widow, spoke on mindfulness in grief and the term she used for death was so beautiful to me, she said "transitioned." Thank you for appreciating the words for that encourages me no end.
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26th May 2020 11:28pm
Have you read any of the “poets react” project that is taking place during covid19? Let me see if I can find a link. It is a beautiful series of poems. Your poem reminded me the project.
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Re: Re. Inhospitable Ordeal
26th May 2020 11:30pm
Here’s a link. It’s actually poets respond. My favorite one is by Jamie R. Wood. Quarantine Day 35.
https://www.rattle.com/respond/
https://www.rattle.com/respond/
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26th May 2020 11:44pm