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front porch pickin'
my guitar
will not resist
when fingers
kiss
her long
sweet
neck
she
moans
or sighs
at gentle
licks
on silver strings
first slow
then quick
gently
crooning
these sad tunes
of broken
hearts
'neath lovers'
moon
ol' time
twang
sounds
like home
this picker's
zoned
he's here
but
gone
will not resist
when fingers
kiss
her long
sweet
neck
she
moans
or sighs
at gentle
licks
on silver strings
first slow
then quick
gently
crooning
these sad tunes
of broken
hearts
'neath lovers'
moon
ol' time
twang
sounds
like home
this picker's
zoned
he's here
but
gone
Published 5th May 2020
Author's Note
A love poem to my guitar. The poor thing married below her station, but we get along well. This was written for the Only Fifty (Unique) Words comp. I keep finding duplicate words. "A's' and 'ands' and 'this'...there is probably one still setting right there in front of my face. If I find it, I'll edit some more.
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5th May 2020 2:25pm
This is wonderful ... love the sensuality ... how it is connected to the guitar ... awesome flow with this ... start to finish ...
5th May 2020 5:02pm
Thanks so much, L.
I worried over the flow, trying not to repeat and retain some of the cadence. I'm glad you like it.
J.
I worried over the flow, trying not to repeat and retain some of the cadence. I'm glad you like it.
J.
5th May 2020 2:40pm
A Wonderful ode to love and respect!!!
How great it is the love between the earthen wood beneath ones hands.
Kick those licks!!!
Excellence in tattooed art!!!
How great it is the love between the earthen wood beneath ones hands.
Kick those licks!!!
Excellence in tattooed art!!!
5th May 2020 5:09pm
soul --
I do love my guitar.
She is a tolerant beauty.
Thanks so much for your kind comments.
J.
I do love my guitar.
She is a tolerant beauty.
Thanks so much for your kind comments.
J.
Ah! The relationship of instrument and musician is a fascinating one! This is a clever write with a subtle rhyme scheme that is quite fun! Well done!
Also, are you a southerner? Droppin’ Gs and using words like ol’ and ‘neath make me think of a bluegrass picker.
Also, are you a southerner? Droppin’ Gs and using words like ol’ and ‘neath make me think of a bluegrass picker.
5th May 2020 5:16pm
Thank you, DaisyGrace.
I am a southerner. Prefer the slower roll of "ol' time music" to the faster one of bluegrass, but love them both.
Mostly finger pick for the joy of it.
I am a southerner. Prefer the slower roll of "ol' time music" to the faster one of bluegrass, but love them both.
Mostly finger pick for the joy of it.
5th May 2020 5:24pm
5th May 2020 11:11pm
Such a lovely dedication to such a divine creation🙌👏
"my guitar
will not resist
when fingers
kiss
her long
sweet
neck" a sentiment I share as well🎸
For 7 years at least, it has been a transformative, joyous journey,
I've learned to appreciate finger picking more as time goes on as well as the instrument as a whole I love it
Enjoyed the way you've penned this!
Great stuff 🙌👏
"my guitar
will not resist
when fingers
kiss
her long
sweet
neck" a sentiment I share as well🎸
For 7 years at least, it has been a transformative, joyous journey,
I've learned to appreciate finger picking more as time goes on as well as the instrument as a whole I love it
Enjoyed the way you've penned this!
Great stuff 🙌👏
6th May 2020 12:13pm
Thank you so much, H.
Playing has been, as you say, a joyous journey.
I'm glad this poem struck a note for you.
I wish you many hours of happy picking.
J.
Playing has been, as you say, a joyous journey.
I'm glad this poem struck a note for you.
I wish you many hours of happy picking.
J.
6th May 2020 11:02am
Dear J,
Bravo! Loved the meter and the music behind these words. I love how you expressed your love of your “long necked beauty” and your author’s note of marrying below her station. That was hilarious. I took a guitar class in school. It was a miserable failure for me but have greatly admired those who can play it. Good luck in the comp. this is a great write. H🌷
Bravo! Loved the meter and the music behind these words. I love how you expressed your love of your “long necked beauty” and your author’s note of marrying below her station. That was hilarious. I took a guitar class in school. It was a miserable failure for me but have greatly admired those who can play it. Good luck in the comp. this is a great write. H🌷
6th May 2020 12:27pm
Thank you so much, H.
Music and poetry and our other artistic aspirations can carry us through the worst of almost anything.
You make my day with your kind words.
J.
Music and poetry and our other artistic aspirations can carry us through the worst of almost anything.
You make my day with your kind words.
J.
11th May 2020 1:02pm
That was incredible... You really captured your love and passion for your music well ❤️
Gorgeous and I love the personification of the guitar. Very clever!! 😊
Keep up the great work, jav :)
Gorgeous and I love the personification of the guitar. Very clever!! 😊
Keep up the great work, jav :)
11th May 2020 2:26pm
