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Hey beautiful ive been meaning to tell you
You have etched yourself to be a permanent stain that will forever linger upon the brain it drives me insane how you always have the upper hand as the days progressed I became another individual in distress losing interest seeing no reason why I should progress, cute face and nice ass have you noticed youve had me in quite a trance I have hard time trying to make all the pieces fit it doesn't sit well knowing the amount of insecurity you have inflicted theres no way to predict what your next move might be all I can do is wait and see
Plenty of variations have been depicted of you I only need two a bitch and a saint its not a hard picture to paint at times you just fuck everyone over till your hearts content its easy to tell by scent of despair that trails where ever they tread a weird thought goes through my head what a way you choose to amuse yourself then you choose to switch faces an leave no traces of the bitch you are thats why I'm always on guard
I've been caught slipping when things between seem to go well then you choose to lead me off the trail what a sick joke that you like to play at a loss for words I don't really know what to say I thought we were finally on the same page I guess not no way out of this cage
I have learned to move on and forget because I have realized in the end I'm the one who going to direct how this movie goes I dedicate this to that beautiful rose with thorns all around that have pierced through letting the pain swirl I write this one to you my beautiful girl
Plenty of variations have been depicted of you I only need two a bitch and a saint its not a hard picture to paint at times you just fuck everyone over till your hearts content its easy to tell by scent of despair that trails where ever they tread a weird thought goes through my head what a way you choose to amuse yourself then you choose to switch faces an leave no traces of the bitch you are thats why I'm always on guard
I've been caught slipping when things between seem to go well then you choose to lead me off the trail what a sick joke that you like to play at a loss for words I don't really know what to say I thought we were finally on the same page I guess not no way out of this cage
I have learned to move on and forget because I have realized in the end I'm the one who going to direct how this movie goes I dedicate this to that beautiful rose with thorns all around that have pierced through letting the pain swirl I write this one to you my beautiful girl
Published 13th Jan 2012
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- Edited 13th Jan 2012 10:42am
13th Jan 2012 10:41am
....then record them mate. You can do that here, and attach the recording to the write.
You sense of rhythm is very good; hanging back, hanging in, timing jumps, skipped beats...you would get far more attention here if you just read them for us.
If you aint keen, there are people on here who are very good reciters...just ask in the forums.
Do it.
(A few lazy bits in here too though, so don't get your head up your arse....tidy up the bits that trip when you read them aloud)
DP
You sense of rhythm is very good; hanging back, hanging in, timing jumps, skipped beats...you would get far more attention here if you just read them for us.
If you aint keen, there are people on here who are very good reciters...just ask in the forums.
Do it.
(A few lazy bits in here too though, so don't get your head up your arse....tidy up the bits that trip when you read them aloud)
DP
13th Jan 2012 3:14pm
13th Jan 2012 3:45pm
16th Jan 2012 4:47pm
i dont think theres cause to be discouraged
i think some people think they are so fucking either full of themselves and the only place they get to be pricks are here where were anonymous i happen to think this is sentimental honest and sweet and the ending perfect . so when others say dumb shit dont let ugly sit and take up too much space in your process man i think your very good you can send me private messages here to my inbox if youd like
i think some people think they are so fucking either full of themselves and the only place they get to be pricks are here where were anonymous i happen to think this is sentimental honest and sweet and the ending perfect . so when others say dumb shit dont let ugly sit and take up too much space in your process man i think your very good you can send me private messages here to my inbox if youd like
