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False Hopes
I hope you love me
Like you love the snow in the morning
Catching rays in the yellow light
Illuminating everything
Love me when it fell so suddenly
On your porch, that evening
Jaw dropping, you were mezmirized
I know you weren’t ready
So now, I ask
Will you miss me?
Like you miss that snow
Blanketing the mountains
White and pure
Will you cry as it melts before you
And you wonder where it all goes?
Will you hold me like you held those last few drops of ice, before it left once more?
I hope so.
Like you love the snow in the morning
Catching rays in the yellow light
Illuminating everything
Love me when it fell so suddenly
On your porch, that evening
Jaw dropping, you were mezmirized
I know you weren’t ready
So now, I ask
Will you miss me?
Like you miss that snow
Blanketing the mountains
White and pure
Will you cry as it melts before you
And you wonder where it all goes?
Will you hold me like you held those last few drops of ice, before it left once more?
I hope so.
Published 3rd Apr 2020
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3rd Apr 2020 11:03pm
There's something about this that's so mesmerizing, Travelingfairyperson. love how you relate the surprise and demise of snow to the beginning and ending of a relationship. As snowfall, love can also take us by surprise. . .
4th Apr 2020 6:07am
We had a freak snowstorm recently, seeing how fast it melted from morning until evening was intriguing. All I had to do was pick up a pen, and look outside. I appreciate you Ahavati
4th Apr 2020 2:51am
Dear T,
This is an amazing trip of a poem. I was headed in one direction at the start but your curve in the third stanza was a surprise turn and I had a whole different story in my head by the single closing line. I really admire how you formatted the piece as well. Gave the reader a bit of closing curtain. Well done. H🌷
This is an amazing trip of a poem. I was headed in one direction at the start but your curve in the third stanza was a surprise turn and I had a whole different story in my head by the single closing line. I really admire how you formatted the piece as well. Gave the reader a bit of closing curtain. Well done. H🌷
4th Apr 2020 6:08am
Gotta love unexpected twists, like unexpected snowstorms in spring! I’m glad it touched you so. Closure is fulfilling :) thanks for stopping by
Anonymous
5th Apr 2020 8:49pm
It truly does evoke an emotion of awestruck delight balanced with a cautionary apprehension; treasure what you have while you have it. A splendid NaPo offering!
5th Apr 2020 11:48pm
Thank you! This has been my most enjoyable Napo yet, thank you for all you and your crew have done to make it happen
