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To Surrender
Am I breathing Lord my God?
Oh find me!
And so on into these first few moments of eternity....
They sing, don't they?
Or is this the great roaring of the lion?
And I have sacrificed like a lamb.....
Oh God
Oh find me....
In these shallows set far from the tempest..
Seeking shelter in a still moonlit midnight.
The world had fallen to its knees.
And have I.
And have I?
The world had taken its toll on thee...
And have I.
Oh find me!
And so on into these first few moments of eternity....
They sing, don't they?
Or is this the great roaring of the lion?
And I have sacrificed like a lamb.....
Oh God
Oh find me....
In these shallows set far from the tempest..
Seeking shelter in a still moonlit midnight.
The world had fallen to its knees.
And have I.
And have I?
The world had taken its toll on thee...
And have I.
Published 2nd Apr 2020
| Edited 3rd Apr 2020
Author's Note
Inspired by the poetry of Summultima
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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3rd Apr 2020 3:43am
I am BLOWN away by the submissions this year! Sheesh! If we were to create a DU NaPo anthology, it would be kickass.
3rd Apr 2020 3:46am
OMG! I know...this is soooo exciting. I'm looking at my updates every morning overwhelmed... and then just can't get enough. Trying to read everyone and comment. I'm so proud of DU
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3rd Apr 2020 3:48am
Yes! I love this time of the year! There is so much love and camaraderie for each other and poetry!
3rd Apr 2020 3:50am
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3rd Apr 2020 3:46am
Jen, this exploded across the screen! Your beseeching of the Lord to give you an answer to that deep need for his love is beautiful in its passion. This reminded me of Johnny Cash's "Spiritual" in which he pleads with Jesus not to let him die alone. But yours is so much more eloquent and even more emotional. I love what you've created here and the feelings of need for love you wonderfully created.
John
John
3rd Apr 2020 3:49am
John....thank you so much. I love your comments, I'm looking forward to snuggling in with your latest at bed time. ...i love your work so much
You naughty boy ✋✋✋
You naughty boy ✋✋✋
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