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HERE🧠 (visceral revisited)
I shiver with a fever.
The deep-throated sound
of drones menace
as they hover near a sickbed.
It’s gonna be a long one,
I can’t tell.
I close my eyes, but
there’s no chance to sleep.
And it’s like I’m not here
as I sit up, groggy and cold,
while flames
leap from my head.
Hospital socks on my feet.
The nightshirt clings,
anonymously,
and the IV drip runs dry.
Every inch my body aches.
What have they done,
what torture awaits
and why am I so afraid?
Than ever I’ve known,
It’s darker in this hall of night
and blood glows,
showing me the way.
I hear a child crying
and an old woman wailing;
they both sound like me!
I stand, quaking, petrified.
Iron filings fall out my nose.
A sight in the lunchroom
cannibalizes why
as his dull eyes stare at me.
But it’s like I’m not here
as the night guard
holds in his gut,
the rest hangs to the floor.
Where it started:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/268955-here/
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 27th Feb 2020
| Edited 9th Oct 2020
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Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 4:46am
Dear JP,
Oooohhhh super scary. Bone chilling deets superbly crafted.
I wish you the best of luck in the comp. I’ll never sleep tonight...
H🌷
Oooohhhh super scary. Bone chilling deets superbly crafted.
I wish you the best of luck in the comp. I’ll never sleep tonight...
H🌷
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 10:28am
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 4:57am
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28th Feb 2020 3:15am
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 5:35am
Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
Why thank you for your generous words & the RL, Elsie. I think this is our first time meeting. I hope you’ve been enjoying it here.
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 10:09am
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 1:42pm
deep thoughts of the mind capturing the depth of the spiritual soul wondering through the unlite hallways of mere darkness nicely composed dear poetess...respect
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
28th Feb 2020 3:28am
I was thinking about you just yesterday, and now here you are.🙂
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece, Stoney, as well as for the RL recommend.🙏🏻
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece, Stoney, as well as for the RL recommend.🙏🏻
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
27th Feb 2020 11:52pm
Makes me dread the hospital. Is it a place of healing, or a nightmare? For me it's the latter. A wonderful write, jadey.
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
28th Feb 2020 5:52am
Remember when I had that awful accident which had me wind up in that ‘facility’ for two months in ‘17 - we had phone conversations about what it was like while I was there and you could hear some of what was going on? Well, I didn’t have to look far for inspiration for this latest poem.
Thank you for coming in to read, and speak to me of your reactions... and for the RL honor, my crowfly friend.
ever
Jadey
Thank you for coming in to read, and speak to me of your reactions... and for the RL honor, my crowfly friend.
ever
Jadey
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
2nd Mar 2020 6:39pm
I can almost see the flickering lights in the hallways, feeling the cold air...scary stuff.
Great write. Good luck in the comp!
Great write. Good luck in the comp!
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
3rd Mar 2020 6:07am
I really appreciate your visit, your thoughts and the read, my Wally friend.
🐾
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Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
3rd Mar 2020 1:34pm
Wow ... this describes my past five days since getting sick ... get emoting/evoking ...
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
3rd Mar 2020 1:48pm
Oh my dear Lil’D.., I’m terribly sorry that you’ve been ill... I was very ill all through the holidays, 2 months.
Is there something I can do to help?
You rest sweetheart. And thank you for coming to see me.
My prayers.🙏🏻💌
ever
Jade
Is there something I can do to help?
You rest sweetheart. And thank you for coming to see me.
My prayers.🙏🏻💌
ever
Jade
Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
3rd Mar 2020 1:51pm
Thank you ... picked up a bug on the ski slopes of Jackson Hole ... only curtailed my skiing for a day ... been getting better every day ... full night sleep last night ... actually jogged a little this morning ...
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
3rd Mar 2020 2:00pm
My gosh, you have a strong constitution. Full night’s sleep — envious!😴
I’ll need to break soon so I can rest.
Thank you for your visits during my morning. It’s coming up to 6AM, whoa...
with warm tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
I’ll need to break soon so I can rest.
Thank you for your visits during my morning. It’s coming up to 6AM, whoa...
with warm tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
Anonymous
19th Mar 2020 9:49pm
I am so happy that I chose to read this one. You are such an amazing writer and I love the dark imagery. It reminds me of something but that is another story.
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Re: Re. HERE (visceral revisited)
19th Mar 2020 10:38pm
Hello, Natalia, and thank you for such words of positive support of my poetic effort; I’m very moved.
Jade🐾
Jade🐾