Alone

I really enjoyed this one. A good heartfelt spill!

Thanks I'm glad you liked it.

Fantastic country song Jordan this is really good do you have a melody

Yeah. I don't know if I would sing it great but I do have a way I would have it sung.

I liked the way you sang your last song. A lot! Please don't let my amateur hack cover confuse you! I just wanted to color inside your lyrics with my sound, for fun! ❤️👏

Sorry Val... I just stuck this into the convo...

I'd like to see the confidence that put up the last video! Bring it back!

I know what I can't sing and what I can. I don't have the voice but I'll find someone lol.

Ok... don't discount your voice! It's nice! Where do you think your songs come from? A talent! I adore songwriters covering their own stuff!!

My voice doesn't have the power for it. I'm not terrible at singing but this a little different of a song.

For some reason I "got it" the second time....  
 
Ahem. Hey... nobody is perfect!  

You are a Johnny Cash knockoff! The last performance had just the right amount of emotional gravity.  
 
For this one.. You need a deeper voice or a lighter, high voice? Curious George, here...

More polished honestly. It's not a song that sounds great unless you know how to sing.

I dunno if you are looking for suggestions, but make a private YouTube vid and give a link to anybody you think could listen!

I know how to cheat your voice a little digitally. I could try to clean and accompany it if I got a pure vocal stem...

That a great poem it could be a country song. Keep on writing

Thanks.

I think this would make a nice song sung to music, maybe guitar..

Thanks it's meant to be. I just have to find someone to sing it first.

The lyrics are good Jordan

If I may ... on alone ... some people need to be accepted into the "norm" of society, at a younger age I felt this "alone" you speak of and desired to have that acceptance. As Time went on and the grumpy old man got grumpier one thing I realized is that that "normal" is nothing but an individual perception based reality and we all have our own idea of what normal is. With that being said, for me at least, I say to hell with that acceptance and their idea of normal, I will stay true to me and if that requires me being alone i have accepted it and am good with that.

If these lyrics are from something you are feeling, be true to you first, and know that is better to be true to you even if there is loneliness at present, as it is a far better choice then being someone your not for the sole sake of gaining acceptance. At some point there will be people who accept you for you, and these people will be the truest, most loyal people, ones worth not being alone for.

Done babbling now, have a wonderful day

and thank you for sharing

Thanks for the comment and feedback. The world is a difficult place sometimes.

I really felt this poem deep inside of me alot of pain im going through and to be with somebody and still feel alone great job keep up the great work love your poetry

Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it.

When I read it out loud, the rhythm schemes came out great as a spoken word. Give it a try. You will see what I mean.  Keep up the good work.

hugs,
buddhakitty.

Thanks. I'm thankful for the advice. It's meant to be a country song in a way but I might try that as well.

Great piece extremely relatable content!! Love the repeated verses
As well
Excellent work!

Thanks.

Great emoting/evoking with this ... good job ...

Thanks

A bit dark for me. But I respect your honesty! Though you feel you are on your own, you are never really alone. Thanks for sharing. ☮️

Thanks for the honesty and comment. I'm not severely depressed just so you know. I do feel alone and on my own a lot though. I'm just writing about feelings I have had lately or in the past. It's meant to be more of an emotional ride for the person listening. We all feel alone so I was trying to convey that as well.

I appreciate your time and love the fact that you are putting it out for us to ride along and be influenced by. Thanks again.

Of course

we all are alone and as Yul Bryner has said man is born lives and dies alone so why moan
when in loneliness think of a friend like me  and as you go along life's loneliness will be cut like slice of buttered bread believe me loneliness is not only for you but  for so many you have poetry up your sleeve compose more lyrics for me .....and so on