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Last night the moon smiled; only 4 me.
So bright were her pearly white teeth
Illuminating little ole me
She must be blind to all the calamities beneath
Last night the moon smiled; only 4 me.
Suspended so perfectly in an ired sky
I saw the past, present and future thru a third eye
Looking out was really looking within
seeing the woes of mother's sin.
Last night the moon smiled; only 4 me.
Not to blind sight, but, in fact to begin to see
The beauty of I, myself and me.
Just as I began to feel the jolts of electricity flowing
I glanced at my neighbor, staring in awe at my confidence glowing.
So bright were her pearly white teeth
Illuminating little ole me
She must be blind to all the calamities beneath
Last night the moon smiled; only 4 me.
Suspended so perfectly in an ired sky
I saw the past, present and future thru a third eye
Looking out was really looking within
seeing the woes of mother's sin.
Last night the moon smiled; only 4 me.
Not to blind sight, but, in fact to begin to see
The beauty of I, myself and me.
Just as I began to feel the jolts of electricity flowing
I glanced at my neighbor, staring in awe at my confidence glowing.
Published 7th Feb 2020
| Edited 15th Mar 2021
Author's Note
The moon did a number on me....
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8th Feb 2020 10:06pm
There is a beautiful intimacy to this write with its measured, soft meter. I might make it an envelope poem, instead. Where the poem ends and begins with the same line, like the moon reflected in still waters.
"Last night the moon shined only 4 me.
So bright were her pearly white teeth
Illuminating little ole me
She must be blind to all the calamities beneath
Suspended so perfectly in an ired sky
I saw the past, present and future thru a third eye
Looking out was really looking within
seeing the woes of mother's sin.
To not lose sight but, in fact, to begin to see
the beauty of I, myself and me
And just as I began to feel electricity flowing
I glanced at my neighbor, staring in awe at my glowing.
Last night the moon shined only 4 me."
Like that. Great work. Thank you for being here with us. 💖
"Last night the moon shined only 4 me.
So bright were her pearly white teeth
Illuminating little ole me
She must be blind to all the calamities beneath
Suspended so perfectly in an ired sky
I saw the past, present and future thru a third eye
Looking out was really looking within
seeing the woes of mother's sin.
To not lose sight but, in fact, to begin to see
the beauty of I, myself and me
And just as I began to feel electricity flowing
I glanced at my neighbor, staring in awe at my glowing.
Last night the moon shined only 4 me."
Like that. Great work. Thank you for being here with us. 💖
10th Feb 2020 3:18pm
Greetings,
Thanks for taking the time to explore my thoughts and share your insight!!! “Envelope poem”.... going to look it up so that I am more familiar with different styles and techniques... your feedback is incredible and I openly receive it... again I am a novice and this platform has become my university of sorts... Again thanks!!!
Thanks for taking the time to explore my thoughts and share your insight!!! “Envelope poem”.... going to look it up so that I am more familiar with different styles and techniques... your feedback is incredible and I openly receive it... again I am a novice and this platform has become my university of sorts... Again thanks!!!
12th Mar 2024 7:50pm
It's wonderful to take a moment and admire the beauty of the universe and everything it has to offer.
Superb work
Superb work
