Derailed

We liked this piece, please continue, tight

I'm glad that you think so, I_IS_ME. Just changing it up a bit! Thanks for stopping by 😊

It works well NewB. I believe it is great to try something new.

Aww, thanks for the encouragement, Lagertha! This was originally written as a regular senryu, but I saw the palindrome competition, and lots of people were posting them, do I decided to try something a little different.

I really don't know much about palindromes, specifically, if they have to be the exact same thing read forward and backwards, letter for letter, word for word, or if the poem itself can be flip-flopped like this one. I'm just not sure if this is actually considered a palindrome, so I'm not sure if it's eligible for the comp. Perhaps one of the more experienced poets could enlighten me :)

I write in free form. If you ever question something about your form, the Cafe' Critique is a great place to get advice from poets on here that know everything about writing. Daniel and David are excellent to give you honest critique, without being brutal.  Between the two of them, their knowledge and experience is phenomenal.

I liked it whether it is a true palindrome or not its an session little write


Thank you for sharing

I'm glad you liked it, Wh1skey!
A little creativity added in this one...
Thanks so much for stopping by 😊

Thanks so much, Mysticalrose 🌹
Thanks for stopping by!

interesting a route not traveled before, are others welcome to jump on board
# well done

Thanks for your clever comment, slip :)
I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment!

Love it, great to have fun with words and structure

Awww, thanks Joy! Thanks for stopping by once again to spread the love :)

Nothing wrong with experimenting NB.
Well done.


hugs,
buddhakitty.

Thanks for being supportive, buddhakitty :)

Good thing you're asking for honest critique- I'd have to say I like the second half of the poem better then the first. :)

Oooh, so you liked how it sounded better the opposite way? I've had this poem sitting around for a while and have created multiple versions of it, alternating the verses, making subtle changes, etc. It was only recent that I decided to make this into an artistic palindrome. Now, I am glad that I did :)

I think this is cool. Nice little piece. It's different but a good different. Unique and overall I enjoyed the placement of everything as well as the poem itself. GJ

Thank you, Cosiest. I'm happy that so many others have made my confidence in this piece a bit better :)

I am so happy that you enjoyed it!

Its great to go beyond what you r used to and the creation is visually great.

I enjoyed your latest visual poem as well, poetic :)
Thank you for your continued readership and your gentle encouragement :)

I think this is really cool NB, it has a visual impact immediately that gets neurons firing, also the non linear, out of the box effect of the palindrome. There is a minimalist impact that is crisp, tightly focused lens on the subject, giving you room to breathe and experiment. 💖

Well, thanks, Daniel! That is a great comment... a really beautifully worded embodiment of my poem you've described. I so love your way with words :)

I'm happy to see you on my page again! Thanks so much for your continued readership 💖

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. The poem I mean. Sorry for joining this party late.

I came to start loving this palindrome word play because of that competition. The whole idea of it is just amazing. It is part of the hardest things I had to write (so far) because somehow the words must read like a mirror, exactly the same, word for word, right to left and left to right, even in its descending and ascending order (at least that's what I have come to believe after reading a lot of other material).

This senryu is beautiful, different and refreshing. It didn't naturally depict the classic palindrome though but it came out brilliantly. I love how it just draws your attention through it's visual structure. Keep up the good work NB

Wonderfully creative and i think a lot of people can relate to this! congrats on a great piece!