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Beautiful Dreamer
I watch her as she dreams
A look of rapture on her face
But this may not be what it seems
Behind the midnight lace
She smiles a secret smile
And her skin begins to shine
She treads the moonlight mile
And murmurs a name that is not mine
He could be from the distant past
And I try not to care
I believe our love will last
And count the stars within her hair.
A look of rapture on her face
But this may not be what it seems
Behind the midnight lace
She smiles a secret smile
And her skin begins to shine
She treads the moonlight mile
And murmurs a name that is not mine
He could be from the distant past
And I try not to care
I believe our love will last
And count the stars within her hair.
Published 2nd Dec 2019
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2nd Dec 2019 10:05pm
I like that balance of romance - and how you fit in a teeny bit of doubt to keep the reader hooked right to the end of the poem, and yet still manage to end on an optimistic trajectory. Nice work, Josh.
2nd Dec 2019 10:17pm
The doubt is all too common, seems to me. Keeping silent about such troubled but often groundless thoughts is often the way to go, lacking actual proof. Best to relax and enjoy what one has romantically. Thank you for the kind words, Josh.
Anonymous
2nd Dec 2019 11:20pm
This is one of my new favorites. ❤
It certainly keeps you hooked until the very end...and then makes you wish it hadn't stopped.
It certainly keeps you hooked until the very end...and then makes you wish it hadn't stopped.
3rd Dec 2019 1:05am
My dear crowfly friend,
You see? I’m so glad we had the chance to talk a while yesterday. I looked forward in the hopes of seeing you show up here earlier today, and then you left this heart-pounding dream of a new poem for us.
It is for me what the first comment posters said how it was for them.
Love to you & your Ninja. XX
Jadey🐾
You see? I’m so glad we had the chance to talk a while yesterday. I looked forward in the hopes of seeing you show up here earlier today, and then you left this heart-pounding dream of a new poem for us.
It is for me what the first comment posters said how it was for them.
Love to you & your Ninja. XX
Jadey🐾
Anonymous
4th Dec 2019 3:29am
Awe Crow.......beautiful ink.......could feel the passion of luv flow thru your words........although it’s not your name.......she in your bed.......waiting for you to hold her........great to see you back.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
4th Dec 2019 10:17pm
dearest Thomas your love of her is pure
I love the image of your counting the stars in her hair
despite her faux pas...
love Brenda ❤
I love the image of your counting the stars in her hair
despite her faux pas...
love Brenda ❤
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