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First Rain
After months without,
it comes unapologetically —
greying skies had been hinting a couple of days,
the wind adding its signal of change,
dry ground licking its lips in anticipation,
believing reward for good behaviour, resilience and fruitful labour
was soon due.
My months
of faithful watering throughout the Summer,
viewed by plants as discriminatory and laced with ignorant bias,
are swept into history as the whole region is soaked,
equally —
generating gasping hours of sensual bliss
across the landscape.
In the garden
delicate petals of a second flowering
of roses are hurled onto the hammered ground
during the grand finale of a massive tropical deluge.
Suddenly it stops, like a passing motorcade - gone;
and sounds of glistened dripping fill the air.
I step outside to smell the moment,
that once-a-year reminder of salvation’s cycle,
and pick up some petals
arrange them mandala-like on an old plate
where they lie in state
before being buried back
into the wet
earth.
it comes unapologetically —
greying skies had been hinting a couple of days,
the wind adding its signal of change,
dry ground licking its lips in anticipation,
believing reward for good behaviour, resilience and fruitful labour
was soon due.
My months
of faithful watering throughout the Summer,
viewed by plants as discriminatory and laced with ignorant bias,
are swept into history as the whole region is soaked,
equally —
generating gasping hours of sensual bliss
across the landscape.
In the garden
delicate petals of a second flowering
of roses are hurled onto the hammered ground
during the grand finale of a massive tropical deluge.
Suddenly it stops, like a passing motorcade - gone;
and sounds of glistened dripping fill the air.
I step outside to smell the moment,
that once-a-year reminder of salvation’s cycle,
and pick up some petals
arrange them mandala-like on an old plate
where they lie in state
before being buried back
into the wet
earth.
Written by
Josh
(Joshua Bond)
Published 18th Oct 2019
| Edited 9th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Comp entry for "Shifting Shades of the Season", hosted by The Poetcast Project.
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Re. First Rain
19th Oct 2019 00:18am
Josh, you did it again. Love the description of the "dry ground licking it's lips in anticipation" which universally (or at least in the parts of where I live) describe those hot summer days and the first rains. Well done sir, well done.
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20th Oct 2019 9:17pm
Thank you Wally, and for the RL; glad you liked the line mentioned - it was one of those lines the muse pops in as you're writing and you think 'what the hell?' and then smile thankful for that out-of-the-blue graced 'connection' to something 'other'.
Re. First Rain
19th Oct 2019 00:34am
You had me with the plant’s views on the discriminatory and ignorant watering. A very funny line that encapsulates your whole personification here. Thanks!
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20th Oct 2019 9:20pm
Thank you Harry for passing this way. Yeah I was thinking of the contrast between my half-hour habitual choosy watering routine - and the deluge from Nature soaking everything equally. Glad you liked it.
Re. First Rain
19th Oct 2019 00:45am
Simply gorgeous! Your description and imagery is so vivid Josh, beautiful and melancholy, makes me wish for that first day of rain where i live.
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20th Oct 2019 9:23pm
Thank you Layla for your appreciate words. Hope rain comes your way soon - Arizona? Nevada? (my geography's not that great).
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19th Oct 2019 4:55am
Wowww this is one of the most creatively awesome poem I've read on here!! How you welcome and herald the rain upon dry earth and its equality as compared to the farmers limitation and bias, just wow, so marvellous your poetics here. I'm so glad to have read from you today and hope to do more often. It delighted my poetic senses. Kudos!!
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20th Oct 2019 9:26pm
Woah, high praise indeed - thank you Zaynab for browsing this way. Glad you enjoyed the read - and 'poeticness' within was stirred
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20th Oct 2019 9:29pm
Thank you SweetOblivion - I'm guessing 'dancing' in the rain always holds something extra special. Rain's presence and absence is always felt powerfully.
Re. First Rain
19th Oct 2019 11:37am
Brother, can't say enough how much I loved it. It's so good!!! I even started reciting it on my own. Bless you.
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20th Oct 2019 9:33pm
Hello Wanderer - really nice of you to pass this way - and thank you for the RL too. You are the first person who's ever commented about reciting in this way. I have my first poetry recital in a month's time so I'm busy learning some poem's (famous others, not mine) off-by-heart in preparation - but you've got me thinking now to include two or three of my own. :))
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20th Oct 2019 9:36pm
Thank you Melia for giving me some interesting comments. Glad you saw the element of 'baptising the moment' with the petals. Nature deserves many more rituals of appreciation that we generally give Her.
Re. First Rain
19th Oct 2019 6:06pm
"delicate petals of a second flowering
of roses are hurled onto the hammered ground.."
Mother Nature.. as viscious as she is merciful.
This is worthy of an RL Josh.
Good luck in the comp, my friend.
(:
Losty
of roses are hurled onto the hammered ground.."
Mother Nature.. as viscious as she is merciful.
This is worthy of an RL Josh.
Good luck in the comp, my friend.
(:
Losty
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20th Oct 2019 9:41pm
Thank you Losty for reading and commenting again - and for the RL. Working on the land a lot, I've come to appreciate that Mother Nature takes no prisoners - two year's ago we had a firestorm mid-October; this Oct a rain deluge. Next week very busy with the olive harvest - those that weren't knocked off the trees by the storm that is.
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20th Oct 2019 9:42pm
Thank you Sky - and for the RL. Probably not as much rain as in Liverpool but it came down with a hell of a force. Have a good week, Josh.
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20th Oct 2019 10:01pm
Such a magnificent painting of words Josh. We don't get very much rain down here in Ozland during our hot summers...but I do love the smell of wet bitumen after a downpour.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Thank you Harry - and for the RL (again again I am honoured). I was reading parts of Oz have had no rain for so long they are about to be abandoned as uninhabitable zones. Serious stuff. Never thought of the first-rain-smell of wet bitumen - you always come up with an interesting thought or new angle on things :))
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20th Oct 2019 10:29pm
Yeah the climate is changing drastically in parts down here...take care my friend.
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21st Oct 2019 7:53pm
💖🙏🏻 Beautifully done, perfect meter and tone, details lush and vivid.
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21st Oct 2019 8:26pm
Thank you Daniel for your kind comments (after that deluge, looks like there's no rain now for at least a week - hope it's not a dry Winter, we need more rain for the wells to fill up again).
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22nd Oct 2019 4:51am
This is a nice snapshot of a nature event that highlights a rebirth through water, and in the end, a death in the reburying of petals, very pretty reading :)
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23rd Oct 2019 8:33pm
Thank you PR, the bright pink petals on the ground kind of begged some sort of ceremonial ending to their cycle.
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26th Oct 2019 00:38am
Josh.. brilliant work.. so much depth, and layers.. you took nature, and it feels like you're talking about humanity.. and the cycles within.. into the RL it goes.. really dig this..
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Thank you Doc for visiting and commenting and the RL - honoured. Glad the poem hit a good note for you. Best regards, Josh.