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I Can't
I would love nothing more than to quit you,
It'd be much simpler that way.
But -
The harsh reality is
you are tattooed in my head.
I anxiously await the day
when my deep brown eyes
bare all my secrets &
you doubt me no more.
They will begin to melt
all your fears of who I am
& what my true intentions are.
Look deep
& you'll see
I am the best
selection by far.
Gaze through the window of my heart,
the reflection of my soul -
And you will finally know
I truly Love You.
Now that I found you,
I don't want to let go.
I wish I could justify this love
But I can't -
I can't find the right words
to describe how it's burning up inside,
crazy for you.
Justify This Love
Because
Words are an insignificant
testimony to what I feel.
~ I can't express ~
(Writer's block)
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Sweet Deep Miss Blossom
Anonymous
22nd Dec 2011 9:08pm
What a delightful dedication to one we feel so many emotions for. It's beautiful. I know you want 'friendly' not 'honest', but I only know how to be honest...
"I love how you say it all and then proclaim you have no words at all, the sell that these words aren't enough to display how you feel is testament to the emotion and a wonderful concept."
"I love how you say it all and then proclaim you have no words at all, the sell that these words aren't enough to display how you feel is testament to the emotion and a wonderful concept."
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re: Sweet Deep Miss Blossom
22nd Dec 2011 10:08pm
Thank you for your all your help with revisions and thank you for the friendly and honest criticism.
You are very much appreciated as always.
~hugs~
You are very much appreciated as always.
~hugs~
Sounds like true love!
22nd Dec 2011 9:18pm
I really like this poem because it describes what one feels when one is truly in love.
I especially like the line:
"They will begin to melt all your fears of who I am & what my true intentions are."
Very beautiful poem!
I especially like the line:
"They will begin to melt all your fears of who I am & what my true intentions are."
Very beautiful poem!
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re: Sounds like true love!
22nd Dec 2011 10:11pm
scarletvelvet,
Thanks for the compliment and your feedback.
Just a heads up, I did some revisions after your comment.I hope it is still to your liking.
:)
Thanks for the compliment and your feedback.
Just a heads up, I did some revisions after your comment.I hope it is still to your liking.
:)
beautiful verse
Anonymous
23rd Dec 2011 1:55pm
so in love - the words say all they have to say - one should be so happy another writes for them like this - nice write - respectfully ^v^
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re: beautiful verse
25th Dec 2011 1:49pm
Touching
28th Dec 2011 00:28am
I like all of your poems, but this one really speaks to me. You really have a knack for words and expression. I vote publication.
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re: Touching
5th Jan 2012 7:10pm
Thank you so very much for your kind words. I am very happy to be able to relate with you through my words/feelings/emotions. Publication??? OMG You are too kind! :)
trust
Anonymous
2nd Jan 2012 8:51pm
it seems that trust is a lost art
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beautiful
Anonymous
6th Jan 2012 3:06am
indeed cherry blossom!
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Express
7th Jan 2012 10:45pm
Their comes a time when their are no words. That's when our bodies take over. I understand what you mean. Love to love; love. It is simply the deadliest thing on earth it can heal just as much as it can kill. Great write
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re: Express
8th Jan 2012 2:53pm
Deep
Anonymous
10th Jan 2012 10:26pm
A very deep and beautiful poem. I especially love how you were able to describe your feelings. Wonderful job!
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re: Deep
10th Jan 2012 11:30pm
re: :o!
12th Jan 2012 4:29pm
:)
12th Jan 2012 10:41pm
cherry_blossom
This is my first read and
I have a feeling I would
love all of what you have
to offer.
This one resonates with a
chilling directness and a
rare simplicity.
The approach you have shown
towards a universal and potent
emotion makes it worthwhile.
Enjoyed and touched.
S'
This is my first read and
I have a feeling I would
love all of what you have
to offer.
This one resonates with a
chilling directness and a
rare simplicity.
The approach you have shown
towards a universal and potent
emotion makes it worthwhile.
Enjoyed and touched.
S'
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re: :)
25th Jan 2012 3:43am
nice
20th Jan 2012 00:28am
re: nice
20th Jan 2012 00:48am
THIS FORM OF WORDS..
Anonymous
21st Jan 2012 2:27am
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re: THIS FORM OF WORDS..
22nd Jan 2012 2:26pm
You are too kind!
It always brings joy to me to be able to have someone read my work and for them to feel that my words are truly coming from my heart. For them to accept my feelings and think of them as 'real good' is an honor to me.
One day I will have 800 more poems completed lol
I am glad I would be able to count on your support.
Thanks again :D
It always brings joy to me to be able to have someone read my work and for them to feel that my words are truly coming from my heart. For them to accept my feelings and think of them as 'real good' is an honor to me.
One day I will have 800 more poems completed lol
I am glad I would be able to count on your support.
Thanks again :D