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Ruptured
You were terribly efficient.
It took me years of
slow-picking at scabs,
collecting tears in bottles,
to even begin to get an inkling
of the depths of my soul.
But you just
sliced me open
quick as gutting a fish,
all of me splashing your boots.
You casually called forth my essence in a flood
And I still can’t put it back.
It took me years of
slow-picking at scabs,
collecting tears in bottles,
to even begin to get an inkling
of the depths of my soul.
But you just
sliced me open
quick as gutting a fish,
all of me splashing your boots.
You casually called forth my essence in a flood
And I still can’t put it back.
Published 8th Oct 2019
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8th Oct 2019 4:16am
8th Oct 2019 6:02pm
Cool! I haven't watched it.... sounds a little more sinister, but I see what you mean.
Thanks for visiting!
Thanks for visiting!
8th Oct 2019 6:33pm
Draining of essence was a theme in the original film, but in the new series, the "ruptured" aspect also comes into play.
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9th Oct 2019 2:45am
gave me a lot to think about
mostly about style and laying out words and emotion
I'm a big fan of your writing, you know ??
mostly about style and laying out words and emotion
I'm a big fan of your writing, you know ??
8th Oct 2019 5:11pm
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8th Oct 2019 6:36pm
Brava, Titanium! Profound, visceral piece. Very effective imagery like the grossamatosa, " all of me splashing your boots."
9th Oct 2019 2:44am
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8th Oct 2019 6:43pm
wow beautiful poetess I am speechless
this is very powerful...
some seem to have this power over us
it hurts me to think of you being hurt like this
after years of picking at your own soft spots
for someone to eviscerate your soul is grievous...
you are beautiful this is a very brave and fierce write
fierce in that you are able to bear your self
so nakedly on the page...
love Brenda ❤
this is very powerful...
some seem to have this power over us
it hurts me to think of you being hurt like this
after years of picking at your own soft spots
for someone to eviscerate your soul is grievous...
you are beautiful this is a very brave and fierce write
fierce in that you are able to bear your self
so nakedly on the page...
love Brenda ❤
9th Oct 2019 2:52am
Thank you, Brenda. I guess it came out sounding more violent and grievous than intended.... I'd say not so much "eviscerated" as "revealed".
Sometimes another soul can do for us what we can't manage to do for ourselves. Like ripping off a bandage.... the vulnerability hurts, but in the end it's a good pain.
I'm grateful for your love and appreciation of my nakedness....
k
Sometimes another soul can do for us what we can't manage to do for ourselves. Like ripping off a bandage.... the vulnerability hurts, but in the end it's a good pain.
I'm grateful for your love and appreciation of my nakedness....
k
