Rival

Aah thank you so much, dear Rose, for such kind words of support.

I wrote this a couple of hours ago and decided to post it in my “Write Free Or Die” comp as a non-entry.

Be well,
Jade

Wonderful sharing of your love of poetry ...

Thank you kindly Lil’D, it’s always so nice to hear from you.

Lovely coming of age Quattrain

Thank you, SweetO, and yes...

A basic & classic structure of four quatrains built around an a/b/a/b rhyme scheme... it relaxes me almost the way writing Japanese poetic short form does.

This piece reads almost hauntingly to me.  And the word usage, and that indomitable rhyme skill of yours.

Oh my, dear Kathy, your generosity always comes from a loving spirit.  Thank you for the honor.

Such qn amazing writer dear

My gracious thanks as a humble pen-pusher, dear Liam.

I have to echo Heaven_sent_Kathy in this instance. I found the rhyme adroitly mellifluous, which is difficult to pull off I think, for it to have both natural flow of message and rhyme. I love how you delved into the tenderness of intimate memory here Jade.

Thank you, dear Daniel, for words so meaningful and touching to me.

I think I have discovered over time, that the difference beteen free-verse & rhyme - it’s as if I became bilingual as a poet, even though either way I’m still expressing in my mother tongue.  

This is the first time I’ve ever thought to express that realization to another person. Your comment helped bring it out.

Jade🙏🏻

It is always a joy to be of service to a lady Jadey. 🌼

And now I’m curious ... did the analogy make sense to you?  It does to me of course, but if the reader doesn’t connect 🤷🏻‍♀️, right?

Here's what I got from it, from my personal experience. There is this sense of yin and yang. In the Toltec wisdom tradition of which I am very fond, the mind is a chorus of many voices, which, through their conflicting belief systems called Agreements, are at a constant internal war. That is how the analogy strikes me, seeing this other part of the self as a rival, dark side versus light, yin and yang. My most recent write was about how, if we commit to fierce self love and present moment awareness, how much energy we can redirect from that internal struggle toward creating something passionate and purposeful.

Your response was most interesting, it’s appreciated.

I was referring to this of what you said:

“ I found the rhyme adroitly mellifluous, which is difficult to pull off I think, for it to have both natural flow of message and rhyme.”

But thank you for ALL your words.🙏🏻