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I Took Too Much
I took too much
Yet I really needed to
The pain is too great
I just need to get through
If I can make it past the night
Then I can hope for tomorrow
But when my body breaks down
It brings me too much sorrow
I took too much
Just to numb the ache
One had me doubled over
Left in the pain's wake
I feel much softer now
Very relaxed, nice and loose
My words come too easy now
But I could also be that aloof
I took too much
But I'm not shameful
I know my limits now and
I no longer feel awful
I tested the waters
And they felt just fine
So I won't give a fuck
If you think I had too much wine
I took too much
But I didnt overdo it
When you live the life I do
You'll try all kinds of shit
Yet I really needed to
The pain is too great
I just need to get through
If I can make it past the night
Then I can hope for tomorrow
But when my body breaks down
It brings me too much sorrow
I took too much
Just to numb the ache
One had me doubled over
Left in the pain's wake
I feel much softer now
Very relaxed, nice and loose
My words come too easy now
But I could also be that aloof
I took too much
But I'm not shameful
I know my limits now and
I no longer feel awful
I tested the waters
And they felt just fine
So I won't give a fuck
If you think I had too much wine
I took too much
But I didnt overdo it
When you live the life I do
You'll try all kinds of shit
Published 7th Jul 2019
Author's Note
Lazy write, idgaf. Feel goooood.
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Anonymous
7th Jul 2019 00:23am
reads
good 👍
I need
to be
in that
``idgaf`` mood
more often!
7th Jul 2019 00:25am
I feel so amazing right now, my bad influence persona would totally recommend it. Thanks for the read, man. And the comment, greatly appreciated.
7th Jul 2019 00:30am
7th Jul 2019 00:31am
Alan, dearest, I've missed your spirit here as of late! I do hope you're making it okay. Thanks, always, for the read and the ever so understanding comment. You always get me.
7th Jul 2019 00:45am
Liv... I felt every word.. Very powerful.
Being of similar mindset that you brilliantly end on. Hold on to that tomorrow.
I say because when I get fucked up I go hard. Some of my writes have been written in the moment, as this one can be interpretated as.
I understand the need to write in the moment..
You are not alone
Sorry if this makes fuck all sense, I'm in the tail end of one, trying to sort my self out, for my daughter. My hope,my tomorrow
Being of similar mindset that you brilliantly end on. Hold on to that tomorrow.
I say because when I get fucked up I go hard. Some of my writes have been written in the moment, as this one can be interpretated as.
I understand the need to write in the moment..
You are not alone
Sorry if this makes fuck all sense, I'm in the tail end of one, trying to sort my self out, for my daughter. My hope,my tomorrow
7th Jul 2019 00:51am
Carpe... Not calling you an animal, BUT... I swear I think you’re my spirit animal. This comment was... well thought and I totally feel you. Thank you for the read, the comment and damn well getting me down to the core!
7th Jul 2019 1:23am
7th Jul 2019 00:59am
you're a beautiful writer lovely Liv
numbing the pain
this is great way of telling it to fuck off
while you're feeling good...
great write...
love Brenda 🌹
numbing the pain
this is great way of telling it to fuck off
while you're feeling good...
great write...
love Brenda 🌹
7th Jul 2019 1:01am
It could be cause I took too much of a few things but. It’s working so I can’t complain! Ugh, Brenda, so much love for you! Thank you for reading and commenting❤️❤️
7th Jul 2019 1:04am
I used to kill my pain with heroin I know this place well comfortably numb it is blissful to silence all the noise sometimes...
I feel you...
love Brenda 💕
I feel you...
love Brenda 💕
7th Jul 2019 3:24am
Excellent spill I know just how you feel👏
Love the authors note, it's a mood I try to be in often when I'm writing
I dig this!
Love the authors note, it's a mood I try to be in often when I'm writing
I dig this!
7th Jul 2019 4:20am
Haha thanks, I was really feeling myself😛
Thanks hunter for the read and comment!🥰
Thanks hunter for the read and comment!🥰
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7th Jul 2019 4:20am
I couldn’t agree more, HF! I’m glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the read and comment, luv!
Anonymous
7th Jul 2019 4:04pm
Your piece is easily adopted by anyone who has felt those feelings, but were unable to express them as effectively as you have. A "translatable" piece...what a poem of this genre should ideally be.
7th Jul 2019 6:50pm
People who are in chronic pain that take too many pain pills and chase it with alcohol in order to function? I hope so, because that’s the reason I wrote it... thanks for the read and comment.
