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moth to my flame
it doesn’t matter if it’s on paper
or if it’s on a dirty table cloth
if my words were a flame
i know that you would be the moth
if my flame is dancing all night long
and cutting shadows on the wall
whether it’s blue, red or golden
you can’t see while so enthralled
they say don’t play with fire
or you are sure to get burned
you can test the heat and see, but
remember you’ve been warned
moths are not at all graceful
like their lovely cousin butterflies
like you, they want to play with my fire
and one by one, they all will die
if you want my flames to graze you
then just take a dip, all too close
let my heat lap at your wings
and I’ll lift you up in smoke
or if it’s on a dirty table cloth
if my words were a flame
i know that you would be the moth
if my flame is dancing all night long
and cutting shadows on the wall
whether it’s blue, red or golden
you can’t see while so enthralled
they say don’t play with fire
or you are sure to get burned
you can test the heat and see, but
remember you’ve been warned
moths are not at all graceful
like their lovely cousin butterflies
like you, they want to play with my fire
and one by one, they all will die
if you want my flames to graze you
then just take a dip, all too close
let my heat lap at your wings
and I’ll lift you up in smoke
Published 29th Jun 2019
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29th Jun 2019 6:33am
29th Jun 2019 6:51am
29th Jun 2019 6:39am
the underlying threat and menace is palpable. Buyer beware! kinda feels like you are tempting the devil but I bet you could give even him a run for his money. A very well constructed piece of art.
on a related subject - the older I get the less fear I feel for circumstances and people. There are two crippling fears that I have left 1. Dyeing alone and 2. Moths LOL
such is life :-))))))
on a related subject - the older I get the less fear I feel for circumstances and people. There are two crippling fears that I have left 1. Dyeing alone and 2. Moths LOL
such is life :-))))))
29th Jun 2019 6:52am
Thank you, David. Yes, that’s exactly what I was going for with this piece❤️
And I am right there with you on the dying alone and moths! Thanks for reading and commenting😌
And I am right there with you on the dying alone and moths! Thanks for reading and commenting😌
29th Jun 2019 8:56am
29th Jun 2019 9:57am
That they do, Alan! Maybe I’m a masochist at heart? Haha, thank you for the read and comment!
29th Jun 2019 1:15pm
29th Jun 2019 1:20pm
29th Jun 2019 8:02pm
Wowo stunning spill I do dig very much 👏
Love the whole thing but the opening I really enjoyed
"it doesn’t matter if it’s on paper
or if it’s on a dirty table cloth
if my words were a flame
i know that you would be the moth "
Great stuff 👏👏
Love the whole thing but the opening I really enjoyed
"it doesn’t matter if it’s on paper
or if it’s on a dirty table cloth
if my words were a flame
i know that you would be the moth "
Great stuff 👏👏
29th Jun 2019 10:21pm
29th Jun 2019 11:58pm
29th Jun 2019 9:44pm
Another deep write Liv thank you.
Here is my musings on moths written ages ago
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110667-moths/
Here is my musings on moths written ages ago
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110667-moths/
Anonymous
29th Jun 2019 11:20pm
the rhythm&rhyme
in this
piece
leaves one
speech`less ...
~Devlin
29th Jun 2019 11:43pm
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1st Jul 2019 2:58am
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1st Jul 2019 2:59am
Thank you, dearest HF! That’s what I was going for😌 Thanks for the read and comment!
