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SENRYU - TRIPTYCH
Breath paused by beauty
Perfectly arranged atoms
Is this seat taken?
Rich, soul stirring voice
Subtle scent intoxicates
Careful words scale walls
Mating dance over
Deeper connecting begins
Risky art of love
Perfectly arranged atoms
Is this seat taken?
Rich, soul stirring voice
Subtle scent intoxicates
Careful words scale walls
Mating dance over
Deeper connecting begins
Risky art of love
Author's Note
The picture is from the internet and I did some artsy stuff to modify. The original is here https://www.lalalovelythings.com/2015/02/sitting-alone/
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. SENRYU - TRIPTYCH
4th Jun 2019 8:25pm
Richness in artistic expression surrounds this piece.
Extremely well done, Bob.
Extremely well done, Bob.
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4th Jun 2019 8:33pm
Thank you so much, Teri! It started with the idea that we are all just bundles of atoms and the arrangement (DNA I guess) of the same is what makes us different. I appreciate your words of encouragement and the add to your RL.
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2019 10:50pm
Speechless at the perfection of this expression... ~Willow~
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5th Jun 2019 1:45am
Thank you so much, Willow! I am left speechless, very touched by your comment. This was one that just flowed out during my bus ride to work.....must have been that romantic setting, right? Thank you for the add as well.
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Anonymous
5th Jun 2019 1:47am
You wouldn't believe how many of my poems are written on the bus...I hear you
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7th Jun 2019 1:45am
It's a great vehicle for writing back dump bump tssssss! Fewer distractions.
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5th Jun 2019 1:49am
Noooo don't do it 😁. I think, perhaps naively so, that now I would be a better dater. Thank you, as ever, for your comment.
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Anonymous
6th Jun 2019 10:46pm
That was a sensual date, point on view, wish it could be me in that situation! lol
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11th Sep 2019 1:40pm
The way you express things through your senryu's is just astounding!
It's like an entire movie took place inside my head while I read these... That is art!
Delanee.
It's like an entire movie took place inside my head while I read these... That is art!
Delanee.
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11th Sep 2019 3:39pm
Wow! Blushing on the bus 😁 Your comment is so encouraging and better than sweet pastry to start the morning🙏 Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! 😁💕