Akuma

this is really deep

I like the emporial feel to it  :) I'll put a few spelling mistakes right for you ok as it will help the overall impact of the piece , underneath , sits , throne (as thrown is to throw something) and scared , devouring , witches , gobblins , tomb , creatures . but nevertheless a good poem , I hope this helps a little and have you read 'the hall of the damned ' by myself ?

hehehe im sorry about the spelling..im terrable

No problem and I too like gig78 am a rhyming person and this is perfect for that kind of fix :)

I'm a rhyming whore .. I admit it I am I love the flow of rhyme.. I think maybe because when I was a kid that's what they taught poetry was about.. Anyways great read... Really enjoyed it

thankyou so much

Loved this poem reading list material

thankyou..everyone is so kind ^^

you have a real good foundation going on here.
the spelling mistakes sort of take away from your poem.
given you are from Japan this is understandable.

I will sort it here for you and you can copy and paste it.

evil crawls from beneath the door    
spirits rise from under the floor    
puppets sing,dance and play    
while Akuma sits in his throne all day    
   
The undead creeps to find you scared    
devouring your body they will not spare    
while whitches and goblins open your tomb    
in my life everybodys doom    
   
creatures scratch on thee beloved face    
haunting your dreams in every place    
   
he sits    
in smile that evil glare    
do you understand the words i share    
   
Subete no aku wa watashi to honshitsu-tekina tejun wa mondai o teiji shinaide nigeru koto ga arimasu....    
   
Kuji-in    
Kuji-in    
Kuji-in!!!!
 
you might want to have a little note on the bottom translating the japanee


anyway, good stuff Alex!

hehehehe lol thanks... :P im terrable

I enjoyed this poem, but I must admit that It`s not the style that I`m into.
But I enjoyed the rhythm and feel.

It is very deep! I really like the "darkness" of your poem!!!!

thankyou so much :)

very deep thought put into this

thankyou so very much

this is an amazing poem i like them i read several and i find them quite intense and beautiful

thankyou very much you are kind

this is great!!!I would like to know what was said at the end.

Subete no aku wa watashi to honshitsu-tekina tejun wa mondai o teiji shinaide nigeru koto ga arimasu....   -May all evils flee me and the essential procedure present no trouble

Kuji-simply means “nine syllables"

I feel like im watching an anime. I love it!

thank you :)
thats a good way to look at it

nice.

thank you

Love Love Love

thank you  so much

i like this one it has more of a fluent tone too it just a suggestion you should try and write things that dont rhyme but have more of a build to them try just typing whatever is in you head and dont go back and re read as you go just keep writing try and remember as much as you can and throw in lines that complement them when you have a ton of lines go back and put them into poem form deleat or re word what you end up with or just take the best parts and use them as first lines idk thats what i did works great :) keep it up though your good

thanks...

I really love the way it rhymes and flows! Good Job!

hehehe thank you so much

This poem is deep, dark, and magical in all the right ways, my friend! It reminds me of many of the old tales of Yokai and other such demons and things that go bump in the night. I am also just a bit reminded of stories like Makai Tensho and Satomi Hakkenden, in which undead Samurai came back to life from their tombs. Your poem is just that powerful and that good.

thanks friend i write from belief in such
others may not agree but im happy to have friend like you to keep me writing

Wooooow!!!!! This is amazing! I love the rythem and flow in which you wrote it. Question what is kuji! And akuma?

kuji is 9 silabis
and akuma is evil/demon/devil

Ah, i see it now. Ok more understandable makes it more cool.

lol :)