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Bring it Back
Your intrinsic blood
intersects with Turtle Island's Heart—
Earth's microcosmic image
mirroring our flowered Universe
Observe summer gnats glint
catching daylight's final hour—
cottonwood buoyant on air;
lush vegetation, consequent
for nested lairs rustling young
Return toward reticent retreats—
reserved evening presence;
arterial memories processing
planetary history, remember
This false empire we ruled:
plastic, fake styrofoam warmth
single use bags—
haystacked needles obvious:
straw and six-pack yokes
swallowing organic roots—
You'll reverse circumstance
Discern water, its overflow;
forests divulging underbrush—
echolocating bats, chirping
crickets, dark Morse-coding
beneath firefly symposiums
receiving natural communion
Heed patterned mistakes;
everything drifts south—
melting pot currents
magnetizing discards of waste:
gravity's double-entendre—
balancing youth alongside age
The human conundrum;
some wanted so badly
to make every difference—
yet, feared such potential success
opposing mass majority
more than their own
self-imposed collapse
Forgive us;
bring it all back
~
intersects with Turtle Island's Heart—
Earth's microcosmic image
mirroring our flowered Universe
Observe summer gnats glint
catching daylight's final hour—
cottonwood buoyant on air;
lush vegetation, consequent
for nested lairs rustling young
Return toward reticent retreats—
reserved evening presence;
arterial memories processing
planetary history, remember
This false empire we ruled:
plastic, fake styrofoam warmth
single use bags—
haystacked needles obvious:
straw and six-pack yokes
swallowing organic roots—
You'll reverse circumstance
Discern water, its overflow;
forests divulging underbrush—
echolocating bats, chirping
crickets, dark Morse-coding
beneath firefly symposiums
receiving natural communion
Heed patterned mistakes;
everything drifts south—
melting pot currents
magnetizing discards of waste:
gravity's double-entendre—
balancing youth alongside age
The human conundrum;
some wanted so badly
to make every difference—
yet, feared such potential success
opposing mass majority
more than their own
self-imposed collapse
Forgive us;
bring it all back
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 22nd May 2019
| Edited 28th May 2019
Author's Note
words 142 / unique 142 * Image Odilon Redon
First Place Winner: Jade's TO WHOEVER INHERITS THE EARTH Competition
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10787/
First Place Winner: Jade's TO WHOEVER INHERITS THE EARTH Competition
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10787/
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Anonymous
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22nd May 2019 3:39am
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28th May 2019 11:58pm
Anonymous
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22nd May 2019 3:54am
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Re: Re. Bring it Back
28th May 2019 11:57pm
I have honestly not known what to say to such a comment about my work. Maybe because I do like lima beans very much. LOL!
Thank you, highlyfunctional. I do appreciate you taking the time to let me know that. I feel very honored.
Thank you, highlyfunctional. I do appreciate you taking the time to let me know that. I feel very honored.
Anonymous
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22nd May 2019 4:13am
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28th May 2019 11:56pm
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22nd May 2019 5:00am
Sage, I’ll say more later. In the meantime, thank you for gracing my competition.
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Re: Re. Bring it Back
28th May 2019 11:56pm
Thank you for the honor of first place, Jadey. I am truly honoured being the competition I was up against. 💜
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29th May 2019 00:25am
You’re so very welcome, dear Sage. Precisely - I know that feeling so well myself. That’s when it really means something that you can feel, deeply.
With congratulations again... you earned it.
Jade🐾
With congratulations again... you earned it.
Jade🐾
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Re. Bring it Back
22nd May 2019 5:09am
The descriptions of waste reminded me of 'The Wasteland', and the eloquent wording of it did too (trash into poetic treasure and awareness of it). The theme of recycling is present in several contexts, there's a certain victory in reusing old things, bringing them back, I feel that..
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28th May 2019 11:55pm
To be compared to Eliot's Wasteland if mind-blowing PoetsRevenge. Thank you muchly.
Anonymous
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28th May 2019 11:55pm
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Anonymous
22nd May 2019 2:01pm
Wow doesn't begin to describe what you managed without repeating a single word.
And what a message for future generations to read and heed.
There is enough S consonance throughout the entire poem to choke and stall out a Peterbilt diesel engine.
The ending tugs at the heart strings.
❤📝
And what a message for future generations to read and heed.
There is enough S consonance throughout the entire poem to choke and stall out a Peterbilt diesel engine.
The ending tugs at the heart strings.
❤📝
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28th May 2019 11:54pm
Thank you, Sweetheart. Your assistance and keen critique is always invaluable.
💜💑💋
💜💑💋
Re. Bring it Back
22nd May 2019 2:09pm
Brought back magical childhood memories of dancing in summer's cottonwood snowstorm.
Thanks Ahvanti for reminding us that once it's gone, it will be gone forever.
Thanks Ahvanti for reminding us that once it's gone, it will be gone forever.
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28th May 2019 11:54pm
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22nd May 2019 11:34pm
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23rd May 2019 00:11am
Wisdom at its most complete A. There's 8 billion people on this planet wanting a little dinner tonight...a glass of clean drinking water...oh yeah, and a new smart phone lol. A profound piece of ink my friend.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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28th May 2019 11:53pm
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26th May 2019 00:21am
It's very powerful and commanding. Almost a bit like a Prophet from the Bible.
Excellent poem.
Excellent poem.
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Anonymous
28th May 2019 10:13pm
Congratulations on the comp win, Sweetie! 🏆💜💑💋
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