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flatline
the day was a cunt to me
she had no address
or I would have written her a complaint letter
dear bitch, thanks for nothing
bloody whore you shackled me to forlorn feelings
a lead weight around my neck
I'm left sinking in regret
all weepy my eyes leaked against my say so
fucked up emotions kept getting in the way
they didn't ask my permission to rally a protest inside me
little emo hookers strolling my streets holding signs
like I'm sad, I hurt, I need to talk
got me all fucked up feeling bad
the day was rigid it would not relent
it had something to tell me
it got all up in my face pushy like
I pushed back answering;
put it on a postcard and send it to me
I'm on vacation I've checked out
don't you see I'm having fun?
there was an awkward silence then flatline nothing
as my emotions, one by one shut down on me
on strike, I feel empty
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Re. flatline
20th May 2019 2:57am
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20th May 2019 2:58am
thank you dearest Tim for understanding what's really going on here... the emotions I'm trying not to feel... I deeply appreciate the love...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. flatline
20th May 2019 3:10am
*group hugs* Don't make it weird, just get in here.
Hi Brenda. I hear you honey. Love and light to you.
Hi Brenda. I hear you honey. Love and light to you.
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Re: Re. flatline
20th May 2019 3:14am
thank you dearest Daniel hugs my friend I deeply appreciate the love...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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20th May 2019 5:32am
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Re: Re. flatline
20th May 2019 1:51pm
thank you graciously dearest, HF you made me giggle with your comment about my little emo hookers I'm happy you liked that line because I did too...I added the colon as suggested I had a hyphen there but perhaps that was incorrect I struggle with punctuation I appreciate the heads up...I'm elated you decided to keep this one because really out of what I wrote last night I liked this one best...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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20th May 2019 2:00pm
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Re: Re. flatline
20th May 2019 2:08pm
I see what you mean dearest HF the hyphen was nearly invisible alone... giggles you rock dearest HF goth band lol you're great...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. flatline
20th May 2019 2:58pm
Your poetry so sucks me in I often find myself role playing the words in my mind.
You made me experience this write.
You made me experience this write.
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Re. flatline
20th May 2019 2:58pm
Your poetry so sucks me in I often find myself role playing the words in my mind.
You made me experience this write.
You made me experience this write.
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20th May 2019 3:00pm
thank you graciously dearest Snuggle a greater compliment I couldn't hope for... I deeply appreciate your thoughts you made me smile...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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Anonymous
20th May 2019 3:05pm
You started this off with that incredible first stanza and then carried it out brilliantly from beginning to end. Those flatlines can be a real bitch. Waiting for the pain to come back even. Just to feel SOMETHING again. Or not. Emotions can be overwhelming...their absence doubly so. I love you, beautiful Dark Angel
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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20th May 2019 3:07pm
thank you beautiful Willow for your deep insight on this poem yes feelings are better than the emptiness of an emotional flatline...I deeply appreciate your thoughts and visits...
I love you...
love Brenda 💕
I love you...
love Brenda 💕
Re. flatline
20th May 2019 9:41pm
Re. flatline
7th Jul 2019 5:57pm
Yet again your words are spellbinding captivating, how we can all have fights internally so many emotions, thoughts, fears all fighting for dominance and control, can be overwhelming and then you summed it up perfectly then there is nothing flatline_______________________
genius once more
genius once more
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Re: Re. flatline
7th Jul 2019 6:13pm
thank you graciously dearest poet for your thoughts on this write you're so kind to me...I deeply appreciate you r insight...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹