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Evolution Of A Suicidal Mind
On edge
Always on the edge
The calm is never there
An enthusiastic masochist
Welcoming the pain
Like an addict scoring the next hit
The invisible noose
Choking life away
The feeling of freedom seeping
Certainty dissolving
Revitalised depression biting
Restless darkness descending
The kiss of a razor
A knowing sharp lover
Tasting naked skin
Hope is a conspiracy
Stabbing at the heart
Increasing pressure points
Emptied of fear
An emotional vacuum
Evolution of a suicidal mind
Always on the edge
The calm is never there
An enthusiastic masochist
Welcoming the pain
Like an addict scoring the next hit
The invisible noose
Choking life away
The feeling of freedom seeping
Certainty dissolving
Revitalised depression biting
Restless darkness descending
The kiss of a razor
A knowing sharp lover
Tasting naked skin
Hope is a conspiracy
Stabbing at the heart
Increasing pressure points
Emptied of fear
An emotional vacuum
Evolution of a suicidal mind
Published 18th May 2019
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18th May 2019 9:35am
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18th May 2019 11:16am
18th May 2019 10:14am
nicely spoken with truth for some its a struggle everyday just to over come the mere darkness that creeps within the soul
18th May 2019 11:17am
Going through some crap at work and this came out, not that I personally I’m suicidal at the moment but have been in the past
18th May 2019 11:50am
you are not alone for things happen that makes you want to just give up I've been there before so i can relate to what your saying everyday is a struggle but the trick is you cant let it beat you down sometimes you got to dig deep beneath the surface of your thoughts and take some time to clear your mind of the darken thoughts and just exhale and inhale
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18th May 2019 11:20am
I have my moments when a line stands out and hits you , just need to be more consistent
18th May 2019 2:16pm
Practice and experience produce consistent! I particularly enjoyed the form of this one, Asperger. Tercets are one of my favorites. The content was well conveyed in that it sparked emotion from the reader in way they could personally relate.
18th May 2019 2:52pm
18th May 2019 3:24pm
"Hope is a conspiracy" - well, yep. You led us down the stepping stone path for sure.
18th May 2019 4:29pm
Yes. “Hope is a conspiracy...” for those who dabble in living within the perimeters of a fantasy world when the brutality of life and truth, becomes too much to bare !
18th May 2019 5:15pm
Wow, this speaks & it's beyond powerful. I don't think I've ever seen depression bottled up in words like this. I can't pick a favorite stanza, but the kiss of skin analogy struck me, not that it resonates. Beautifully constructed work!
18th May 2019 5:25pm
This comes from the dark side of me I try to keep bottled up, but as you see it won’t let me keep it quiet for too long
21st May 2019 10:14pm
22nd May 2019 1:14am
21st May 2019 10:32pm
This read has me realizing that my suicidal tendencies are much much different from lots of other
tortured persons.
You journey is Your own (and well spilled) and not the same yet the same as mine
tortured persons.
You journey is Your own (and well spilled) and not the same yet the same as mine
22nd May 2019 1:17am
Well its all going to be different yet it will come under the same umbrella . Just like autism for example me and sky are different yet we come under the same umbrella . I suppose its like a fingerprint we are unique
