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A Summer Day ( String of haiku)
The soft wind caress
The young tender leaves of trees
Soothing and cooling
Bright glossy green leaves
Enduring the blazing heat
Of a summer day
I see them swaying
Under the bright summer sun
To the singing wind
Orchids in full bloom
Sitting on a balcony
Join the revelry
They nod to the wind
Their flowery heads bobbing
To his soft whispers
Blades of grass growing
In a little patch of earth
Sway in unison
The wind is playful
He blows soft gentle kisses
The whole afternoon
The young tender leaves of trees
Soothing and cooling
Bright glossy green leaves
Enduring the blazing heat
Of a summer day
I see them swaying
Under the bright summer sun
To the singing wind
Orchids in full bloom
Sitting on a balcony
Join the revelry
They nod to the wind
Their flowery heads bobbing
To his soft whispers
Blades of grass growing
In a little patch of earth
Sway in unison
The wind is playful
He blows soft gentle kisses
The whole afternoon
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22 of 30 entry for NaPoWriMo 2019
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Re. A Summer Day ( String of haiku)
I cannot help but clack my finger bones like an abacus when someone writes a haiku lol but there are many forms and syllabic counts available. In capturing the living motion of these vignettes of nature, I believe you strike into the heart of what a haiku was designed to achieve, a picture of nature that speaks silently of some inner harmony of the author and how that projects into the milieu and the microcosm of their experience. Enjoyed this sweet reverie.
Hello. :) It's nice to meet you. I'm Daniel.
Hello. :) It's nice to meet you. I'm Daniel.
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Re. A Summer Day ( String of haiku)
3rd May 2019 7:27am
Hello Daniel, nice meeting you too.:-) Thank you for taking time to read and comment on my haiku. I wrote that while observing the things around me, the flow of life in nature. I appreciate your visit. Thank you.
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Re. A Summer Day ( String of haiku)
3rd May 2019 11:50am
This string of Haiku flows so well together; its reads to me so keenly observed and delicately written.
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3rd May 2019 12:46pm
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3rd May 2019 1:51pm
This was one of my favorites of your posts, Summer! The imagery is so soft it lulls the reader!
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3rd May 2019 1:56pm
Re. A Summer Day ( String of haiku)
7th May 2019 5:10am
This really does flow nicely, it has that summer vibe, I wish I could experience those wild orchids, they sound amazing bobbing in the breeze. The only thing close to orchids here in the north are 'lady slippers', a type of tiny orchids that grow in wild fields..
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7th May 2019 5:19am
Thank you PR for the comment and visit. Much appreciated. My neighbor has orchids of different varieties.