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Wake me up...
I feel you
I taste you
I dream of you
When the light tears through my grey curtains...
Grazes my skin,
Blinding my eyes,
I am reminded of you.
The warming sensation is so gentle and welcome,
Yet the glazed over look in my eyes shows otherwise.
I used to dream of you waiting for me to wake up,
holding out your palm face up...
I was never able to reach up and grasp that so desired palm…
I taste you
I dream of you
When the light tears through my grey curtains...
Grazes my skin,
Blinding my eyes,
I am reminded of you.
The warming sensation is so gentle and welcome,
Yet the glazed over look in my eyes shows otherwise.
I used to dream of you waiting for me to wake up,
holding out your palm face up...
I was never able to reach up and grasp that so desired palm…
Published 1st Dec 2011
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1st Dec 2011 8:56am
those gone or left, is sad, but the memories are poignant. Good words Nox. Room for improvement but good all the same.
1st Dec 2011 9:05am
This poem is like a good cooking pot; conducts the heat - feeling, etc. - from one place to the other. I feel the mourning here.
1st Dec 2011 10:15am
1st Dec 2011 9:13am
Hi Nox,
Welcome to DUP. I hope that you will find as much pleasure sharing your works as I have... Beautiful. I am no poet, I just write from my heart and mind..
Cheers. Vixen ;-)
Welcome to DUP. I hope that you will find as much pleasure sharing your works as I have... Beautiful. I am no poet, I just write from my heart and mind..
Cheers. Vixen ;-)
1st Dec 2011 9:20am
Welcome to DUP.
And what a start.
This one is raw.
Visceral in its
inherent pathos
which has a sick
sweet flavour.
Looking forward
Light'
S
p.s- Thanks for adding my poem
to your reading list. :)
Enjoy your stay.
And what a start.
This one is raw.
Visceral in its
inherent pathos
which has a sick
sweet flavour.
Looking forward
Light'
S
p.s- Thanks for adding my poem
to your reading list. :)
Enjoy your stay.
1st Dec 2011 10:13am
Thank you! It's the most recent thing I've written. Changed it up a bit. Raw is what I'm going for :p
And you are verrry welcome.
And you are verrry welcome.
1st Dec 2011 4:28pm
2nd Dec 2011 12:41pm
Including the picture was a nice touch. It adds to the sensuality of the poem, as well as the meaning. She looks both seductive, yet indifferent as she looks away.
Anonymous
8th Dec 2011 3:32am
This reminds me vaguely of Crush, a poetry collection by Richard Siken. I like the "grey curtains" and the upturned palm. Thanks for the read, Nox.
15th Jan 2012 12:47pm
I feel the longing. I travel a great deal and we share that longing feeling often. Yours ends sad - I feel it in your words but hope to not feel it in my heart. Great writing!
15th Jan 2012 9:43pm
i like where you are going with this and as you grow into this talent the modification will be remarkable. good job Nox.
