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I eye ivory
Italy teems with knickknack shops
Sweaty swarthy itenerate men with Indian goods
Hawk wares to unsuspecting tourists
My iris ignites as carefully carved wonders gleam with illumunation
I want to wrap up the place,
The smell of falafel competing with catch of the day
The bronzed bodies slick with sweat
The intersection between wharf and cannery row
And take it all home.
But ivory is illegal to buy, much less transport
And my ideal vacation does not have room for a customs arrest.
The impenetrable gaze of the salesman beacons...
Take a chance -it says
You only live once.
Italy teems with knickknack shops
Sweaty swarthy itenerate men with Indian goods
Hawk wares to unsuspecting tourists
My iris ignites as carefully carved wonders gleam with illumunation
I want to wrap up the place,
The smell of falafel competing with catch of the day
The bronzed bodies slick with sweat
The intersection between wharf and cannery row
And take it all home.
But ivory is illegal to buy, much less transport
And my ideal vacation does not have room for a customs arrest.
The impenetrable gaze of the salesman beacons...
Take a chance -it says
You only live once.
Published 28th Apr 2019
Author's Note
For the letter I competition.
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28th Apr 2019 4:48pm
I could see you doing well in this comp. The message is nuanced and interesting, touching into the psychosocial fibers of being, observing, interacting. Emphasis upon I done with originality. Well struck TG.
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10th May 2019 9:41pm
I like the way you make a complete short story out of it all, signalling the main player/event (as it were) with the word ivory at the beginning, and then bringing it back into the story at the end.
{ did you mean salesman 'beacons', or 'beckons'? }
{ did you mean salesman 'beacons', or 'beckons'? }
