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Pressed Upon My Window
Raindrops pressed upon my window
but it was locked
my eyes, scorched along with the underbrush
couldn't see
but you peered in anyways
digging deep, you found a shaft
a breech, I wasn't counting on
and you crawled across my threshold
storms weakened
and my knees grew steady for a day
morning roused and bit my tongue
but words weren't there to praise
and tongues would just get in the way
it was a touch that was needed
tenderness of heart
putting together what was apart
my blindness was seen in every feel
as my fingers undid your blouse
I caressed you whole
lathered you in seduction
as you took my soul
but I was kind and gave you all
of what was hiding inside my mind
but it was locked
my eyes, scorched along with the underbrush
couldn't see
but you peered in anyways
digging deep, you found a shaft
a breech, I wasn't counting on
and you crawled across my threshold
storms weakened
and my knees grew steady for a day
morning roused and bit my tongue
but words weren't there to praise
and tongues would just get in the way
it was a touch that was needed
tenderness of heart
putting together what was apart
my blindness was seen in every feel
as my fingers undid your blouse
I caressed you whole
lathered you in seduction
as you took my soul
but I was kind and gave you all
of what was hiding inside my mind
Published 23rd Apr 2019
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23rd Apr 2019 2:22pm
23rd Apr 2019 2:50pm
23rd Apr 2019 3:11pm
23rd Apr 2019 2:53pm
The title and the opening 5 lines paint a picture that instantly drew me in, wondering ... what ... happens ... next. How is it resolved? Great write.
23rd Apr 2019 3:02pm
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23rd Apr 2019 3:10pm
There always seems to be a crack made just for them to slip in through. And the havoc that's wreaked after is indescribable. You and your layers...love it!
23rd Apr 2019 3:15pm
23rd Apr 2019 5:10pm
In the beginning i was thinking of voyeurism al the way
but You summed it all up nicely at the end.
Very tender spill, Brother
but You summed it all up nicely at the end.
Very tender spill, Brother
23rd Apr 2019 7:47pm
23rd Apr 2019 9:10pm
Fine work, JusTim. You point out that speech can be an impediment, with "tongues get in the way." Other, more important factors, come into play. Passion, for example. There's an abundance here. Excellent.
23rd Apr 2019 10:04pm
