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I Can Already Tell
I can already tell
It's gonna be one of those days
Where you gt knocked down
And you gotta fight your way back
My whole life
Has just been one of those days
You'd think I'd give up
But I haven't just yet
But. What. Scares. Me.
Is that I think I think I might be
Real close
To giving up
And giving in
And pissin off
All my friends
Who've helped me through
This hard time
Without once
Wonderin' why
They bother with me
The one girl who sees
Everything Differently
It's gonna be one of those days
Where you gt knocked down
And you gotta fight your way back
My whole life
Has just been one of those days
You'd think I'd give up
But I haven't just yet
But. What. Scares. Me.
Is that I think I think I might be
Real close
To giving up
And giving in
And pissin off
All my friends
Who've helped me through
This hard time
Without once
Wonderin' why
They bother with me
The one girl who sees
Everything Differently
Published 30th Nov 2011
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1st Dec 2011 1:46pm
I will always be a fan of poetry whether lyrics, dark, etc that is fueled by raw emotion and desire.
Kudos
Kudos
1st Dec 2011 11:11pm
Insightful, deep felt.
Love the personal touch.
Two things,
1. Where you gt knocked down
gt should be 'get'.
2. But. What. Scares. Me.
Different and works for
me.Very well.:)
And I can tell you somehow enjoyed
this.
Write on.
S'
Love the personal touch.
Two things,
1. Where you gt knocked down
gt should be 'get'.
2. But. What. Scares. Me.
Different and works for
me.Very well.:)
And I can tell you somehow enjoyed
this.
Write on.
S'
Anonymous
2nd Dec 2011 1:29pm
A Masterpiece.
Perfect Poetry.
Al .
Perfect Poetry.
Al .
2nd Dec 2011 5:59pm
Contemplating both side of the coin-- Give in or Not to. Just delaying, flipping the coin, just waiting to reveal its outcome.
@"But. What. Scares. Me"--- I think its the Dimensional Ambiguity our hearts & our minds play which scares us most.
"My whole life
Has just been one of those days
You'd think I'd give up
But I haven't just yet" --- can relate.
@"But. What. Scares. Me"--- I think its the Dimensional Ambiguity our hearts & our minds play which scares us most.
"My whole life
Has just been one of those days
You'd think I'd give up
But I haven't just yet" --- can relate.
4th Dec 2011 3:03am
Thank you all sooo much! It's a work in progress, I'll comment here when I come up with a second verse or something! :)
21st Dec 2011 11:49pm
i enjoyed this. perhaps you could go into further depth and describe how "one of these days" go. use that emotion to help the reader understand just how hard some days are. great work
