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Love Sonnet (After Neruda)
I do not love you as if you were made of the finest gold
This world has to offer or because your smile can start
A fire. I love you as the darkness desires light and cold
Touches crave warmth. There is something your heart
Always wants; to always be loved in all the right ways
And places without fear of being broken or delicate.
I wish to love the deepest parts of you, not for days
You spent in the summer, but when you felt desolate,
Alone and everyone ignored you when you needed
Love. That is when I will prove you and them wrong
Because I never let your tears or voice go unheeded.
I know only of one way to love you with no ping-pong
Battle. What I want ends with your head against my
Chest as you sleep and dream, my hand on your thigh.
#PabloNeruda
This world has to offer or because your smile can start
A fire. I love you as the darkness desires light and cold
Touches crave warmth. There is something your heart
Always wants; to always be loved in all the right ways
And places without fear of being broken or delicate.
I wish to love the deepest parts of you, not for days
You spent in the summer, but when you felt desolate,
Alone and everyone ignored you when you needed
Love. That is when I will prove you and them wrong
Because I never let your tears or voice go unheeded.
I know only of one way to love you with no ping-pong
Battle. What I want ends with your head against my
Chest as you sleep and dream, my hand on your thigh.
#PabloNeruda
Published 22nd Feb 2019
| Edited 23rd Feb 2019
Author's Note
Submitted for The Saddest Lines Written competition and inspired by Pablo Neruda's "Sonnet XVII"
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Anonymous
23rd Feb 2019 00:04am
Worthy of the great poet. This is true love, the one that penetrates every bit of the individual, mind, body and soul. A true gem of the finest romantic literature. Beautiful ink. J
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23rd Feb 2019 5:26am
Superb romantic rhyming...the best of wine starts out as bittersweet
bravo poetess
Jeff
bravo poetess
Jeff
23rd Feb 2019 6:41am
23rd Feb 2019 2:22pm
Elena this is such a lovely and befitting tribute to Neruda!
Best of luck in the comp!
Best of luck in the comp!
23rd Feb 2019 7:29pm
Anonymous
24th Feb 2019 1:45pm
One week left to go. Good luck in the comp!
24th Feb 2019 8:41pm
24th Feb 2019 9:58pm
Hi, eswaller
I must tell you that sonnets have a special appeal for me. It must be something about the secure structure. And although sonnets may cover a wide range of content, I almost always think of the genre as a conveyance for love.
The maturity of your piece is as surefire as the clout of its character and the well-appointed image carries its thousand-words eloquence alongside the naked text.
I must tell you that sonnets have a special appeal for me. It must be something about the secure structure. And although sonnets may cover a wide range of content, I almost always think of the genre as a conveyance for love.
The maturity of your piece is as surefire as the clout of its character and the well-appointed image carries its thousand-words eloquence alongside the naked text.
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3rd Mar 2019 2:32am
Aaah very nice! I’m learning how to and want to write a sonnet. Hopefully I can someday, sonnets just seem so out of my mindset in writing; I don’t know why. You did very good ! Nice. Respectfully I say.
