Sipping On Her Soul

I'm glad that you liked it, sky_dancer! I'm honored by the RL :)

what a delicately beautiful write
it made me imagine
the most gentle and tenderest of kisses...

sigh gorgeous...

love Brenda 🌹

That's precisely what I was trying to capture; It was only after I had written it that I realized the double meaning, heh.

Thanks so much, Brenda! Your comment is really sweet :)

That means a lot coming from you, Barona! I'm really happy you like it!

Thanks so much for that nice compliment too :)

Very sweet

Thanks Leo... She's certainly the sweetest :)

lie this
in a few lines cover all their is in lustful thoughts

nice work

Thanks for that, D C, and thanks for that and thanks for stopping by :)

It's a very nice visual!

I'd suggest losing the 'of' in the title so it reads simply, "Sipping Her Soul"
Also, if you changed out the like for as in the simile of L2, you'd create some very nice assonance of a and consonance of s between L1 and L3.

Again, very nice!

Thanks for your compliments and criticisms, Ahavati :)

I had considered what you suggested, but I decided to retain the alliteration into line 2 rather than use the simile you suggested. I am partial to metaphors, especially in this case, where using 'as' could make it sound as if I am the hummingbird rather than hummingbird-like. It just feels more literal that way.

As for the title... That part I'm still thinking on!

I appreciate you stopping by :)

Absolutely lovely haiku👏
Love the title you have already
Superb spill👏👏

Thank you for your kind compliments, as usual, Hunter!

You're sweet, Whispers :)

Thanks for the RL and the awesome compliments!

Sipping the sweetest nectar. Wonderful imagery. sweet ink NB.:-)

Thanks, summer! You always leave me kind feedback :)

You're welcome NB.your posts deserve nice feedbacks :-)

I'm glad that you think so 😊

Beautiful.

I'm happy to hear that you think so. Thanks for stopping by eerie :)

I don’t write erotic poetry much either... but I love this piece because it is just enough here... draws the reader in and left us speechless. Really beautiful

That's a heck of a compliment, Muse! Thanks so much!

That's a nice comment, Rex... Thanks! Just a touch of some of my greatest passions.

Absolutely lovely. Suberb imagery.😉

I'm glad that you liked it! Thank youuuu, Soulz :)

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Good writing ✍️

Hey sunlite! Thanks for taking the time to stop by and check out my poetry again :)

And thanks for that compliment!

NP !
Write—>0N✍️

Sleek !  Nice.

Hey Robert! Thanks for dropping by to say hello. I'm glad that you enjoyed the haiku :)

you got some of the best haikus....very nice!!!!!

Thank you, Naajir :)

Very beautifully erotique, NB, lovely

Thanks so much for the feedback, Noire. I'm glad that it liked it!

NewB, sorry I missed commenting when this was live.  But I had to return and read it again.
Its simplify of words belies its complexity of nuance.
Quite fitting to the form.

Thanks for that wonderful comment, cab. No worries! I am just happy that you enjoyed the haiku :)

Simple ... beautiful ... fragile ... love love love this ...

Thanks for that, LilDragonFly! I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much! That makes me happy :)