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The pit
We used to think that this was it,
a pointless place
in a bottomless pit.
You probably can't escape this pit
this ancient pit
that is your psyche...
We've got to leave
this deep dark pit,
Just close your eyes
lose the memories,
Leave this world
forget the future,
to these gashes
we are the sutures.
This empty pit is way to deep
So just lean way back
dont fall asleep
I'm coming with you
lets take a peep
Lets run inside
it's ours to reap.
a pointless place
in a bottomless pit.
You probably can't escape this pit
this ancient pit
that is your psyche...
We've got to leave
this deep dark pit,
Just close your eyes
lose the memories,
Leave this world
forget the future,
to these gashes
we are the sutures.
This empty pit is way to deep
So just lean way back
dont fall asleep
I'm coming with you
lets take a peep
Lets run inside
it's ours to reap.
Author's Note
Something I wrote a couple years ago in the midst of my psychedelic binge
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Re. The pit
7th Feb 2019 2:22pm
dearest Hunter I love this
favorite lines...
"Just close your eyes
lose the memories,
Leave this world
forget the future,
to these gashes
we are the sutures. "
so deep...
love Brenda 💕👏✌
favorite lines...
"Just close your eyes
lose the memories,
Leave this world
forget the future,
to these gashes
we are the sutures. "
so deep...
love Brenda 💕👏✌
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Re: Re. The pit
7th Feb 2019 6:46pm
Thanks so much for your kind words Brenda!🙏 appreciate you reading glad you dig this old piece✌🙏
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7th Feb 2019 6:46pm
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7th Feb 2019 6:48pm
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Re: Re. The pit
7th Feb 2019 6:51pm
Another fabulous comment which is a magnificent spill in itself👏🙏
Also could be a perfect ending to this older piece
Appreciate your eternal kindness and words of inspiration!🙏
Also could be a perfect ending to this older piece
Appreciate your eternal kindness and words of inspiration!🙏
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Re. The pit
7th Feb 2019 7:32pm
It sounds like a nice quiet place to go. May I have the address. Very deep write....xo
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Re: Re. The pit
8th Feb 2019 12:22pm
Indeed it is all ya need to get there is a handful of mushroooms lol
Thanks so much for reading!🙏
Thanks so much for reading!🙏
Re. The pit
7th Feb 2019 10:21pm
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8th Feb 2019 12:23pm
Re. The pit
8th Feb 2019 6:29am
it feels the shaping up of our shattered selves to One..from the deep dark abyss..I loved its strong reference as 'pit' & yes, its sharply infinitely running deep as that of the equally risen altitudes of the spirited skies ..by the trying One. very uplifting verses, the message. another soul probing write Hunter, light n love x
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Re: Re. The pit
8th Feb 2019 12:25pm
Thanks so much uma! I so appreciate you taking time to read and comment!
And thanks for the vast amount of wisdom you share with each comment🙏
And thanks for the vast amount of wisdom you share with each comment🙏
Re. The pit
9th Feb 2019 6:14pm
This seems beautifully hypnotic to me, and deep on a psychological level --awesome write!
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9th Feb 2019 6:23pm