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honeybee

Visual Poem honeybee
cabcool
Written by cabcool
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Re. honeybee
6th Feb 2019 8:13pm
Ignorance is bliss, as they say. Beautiful haiku!
NewBeginnings
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Re: Re. honeybee
7th Feb 2019 6:12am
Indeed, NewBeginnings.  Thanks for your hi-5.
cabcool
Re. honeybee
(Tams)
6th Feb 2019 9:06pm
The imagery is beautiful. I strained somewhat reading it and feel the text could've been just a tad darker.  
Ahavati
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Re: Re. honeybee
- Edited 6th Feb 2019 10:09pm
6th Feb 2019 10:00pm
Thank you.  I agree with you and shall improve it visually.
cabcool
Re: Re. honeybee
6th Feb 2019 10:13pm
I'm certain that's much better now.  Do you understand the language of the last line?
cabcool
Re: Re. honeybee
(Tams)
7th Feb 2019 2:11am
Yes it is! Much!
Ahavati
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