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Lost
Hello
I came to breathe you in
as my skies grew dark
and turmoil and time tested
everything I have ever been
these eyes suffered
feigning smiles buffered
what was really churning deep within
blackened and unzipped
torn out, rejected and ripped
bleeding out in an ever silent spin
you offered shelter in the driving rain
putting up with the clearly insane
a soothing smile sent to appease the pain
allowing one to be whole again
I came to breathe you in . . .
to bathe lovingly in your company
and in your mind
to inhale your scent of freedom
in an otherwise fucked up grind
I didn't know I was lost until I found you
I came to breathe you in
as my skies grew dark
and turmoil and time tested
everything I have ever been
these eyes suffered
feigning smiles buffered
what was really churning deep within
blackened and unzipped
torn out, rejected and ripped
bleeding out in an ever silent spin
you offered shelter in the driving rain
putting up with the clearly insane
a soothing smile sent to appease the pain
allowing one to be whole again
I came to breathe you in . . .
to bathe lovingly in your company
and in your mind
to inhale your scent of freedom
in an otherwise fucked up grind
I didn't know I was lost until I found you
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Re. Lost
6th Feb 2019 3:48pm
Well done. That sweet smell of respite seeped from your words. The last stanza said it all.
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6th Feb 2019 5:33pm
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6th Feb 2019 10:10pm
The lost feel redemption in a source of love, even "the clearly insane." That touch I doubt. You evidence control, not chaos, in your lines. Well done!
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6th Feb 2019 10:39pm
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Anonymous
6th Feb 2019 11:30pm
He is Crowfly, I can vouch for him on that.
You're welcome, Tim.
MZ.
You're welcome, Tim.
MZ.
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Anonymous
6th Feb 2019 11:28pm
Timothy,
I really enjoyed that my friend! (the language though). Kidding, fantastic write.
I wish everyone would stop writing until I could get back on full time, though. lol.
Nice!
MZ.
I really enjoyed that my friend! (the language though). Kidding, fantastic write.
I wish everyone would stop writing until I could get back on full time, though. lol.
Nice!
MZ.
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7th Feb 2019 00:36am
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Anonymous
7th Feb 2019 4:59pm
Thank you!(and the rest of you DUP's can thank me later for getting this promise! You guys really dodged a bullet by me getting that promise...hey! you're not supposed to be reading this, Tim!). lol.
MZ.
MZ.
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7th Feb 2019 1:10pm
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