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Suffering
I can feel the demon
Inside very deep down abdomen
Bare his fangs and open his claws
Clogging all my vessels
Cause me to tremble
And weaken my substance
Give me an insubstantial existence
Hard to explain cuz I’ve lost voices
And even can’t reason with him
Now I’m making a silent fight
I am afraid I wouldn’t win
Until the point he is caught
And I could throw him out….
Inside very deep down abdomen
Bare his fangs and open his claws
Clogging all my vessels
Cause me to tremble
And weaken my substance
Give me an insubstantial existence
Hard to explain cuz I’ve lost voices
And even can’t reason with him
Now I’m making a silent fight
I am afraid I wouldn’t win
Until the point he is caught
And I could throw him out….
Published 4th Feb 2019
Author's Note
I hate being sick like this....mute and dumb...
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4th Feb 2019 8:14am
Bravo poetess...a release into words.... poetic rhyming self-exorcism...
love it
Jeff
love it
Jeff
4th Feb 2019 8:17am
4th Feb 2019 8:18am
Thank you my dear friend...a release of the terrible situation here.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Anonymous
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4th Feb 2019 10:14am
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4th Feb 2019 11:52pm
Thank you so much for the nice feedback. Glad to have your read.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
4th Feb 2019 11:50am
Good imagery but what do you mean by the last three lines? You are afraid until it’s caught or you’ve already caught and thrown it out?
4th Feb 2019 11:56pm
No, still fighting the flu. But I'm feeling much better.
Thank you for the ask.
love
Jasmine
Thank you for the ask.
love
Jasmine
loved loved the last line so much. dark and deep closing to a wonderful poem. hope you are feeling better💗
8th Feb 2019 11:22am
I do feel much better even though the voice is still hoarse...glad people could understand what I talked about.
Thank you my dearest friend for the care.
love
Jasmine
Thank you my dearest friend for the care.
love
Jasmine
8th Feb 2019 9:50pm
I hear you Jasmine. *hugs* I have found that the purpose of suffering is awakening and transformation. I hope you come through this and find peace.
Daniel
Daniel
8th Feb 2019 10:36pm
Thank you so much for the warm hugs. I hear you Daniel. The renewing of my body and spirit is still going. Perhaps it's one of God's plans on me. But anyway, I am feeling more and more healthy now.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
6th Mar 2019 3:14pm
6th Mar 2019 4:01pm
6th Mar 2019 4:04pm
You are welcome, hun. I dig your way of how you write and so I will be reading more of your work. I am half Asian by the way, and so I saw an Asian poet and had to check your stuff out. My dad was in the military and met my mother in Thailand and so I am half Thai and half Irish.
6th Mar 2019 4:11pm
Wow It's really exciting to know such. I will read yours too. I want to know how the Asian side influences you to think and write.
Thank you so much for telling me about that.
Love
Jasmine
Thank you so much for telling me about that.
Love
Jasmine
6th Mar 2019 4:55pm
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3rd Jan 2020 3:20pm
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5th Jan 2020 7:30am
I am fine now. Thank you Didier for the encouragement. Glad you know I need a confidence booster.
You just showed me what a nice person you are to a foreign Asian woman who tried hard to get into this poetic world.
Once again, thank you so much for the kind words that just indeed what I want.
Love
Jasmine
You just showed me what a nice person you are to a foreign Asian woman who tried hard to get into this poetic world.
Once again, thank you so much for the kind words that just indeed what I want.
Love
Jasmine
Anonymous
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5th Jan 2020 9:38am
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5th Jan 2020 5:24pm
