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You
When you’re sad, I’ll hold you close to me…and catch your tears.
And when you’re old, I’ll still be there for you…through all the years.
You are beautiful like evergreens, riverbeds, and rocky streams!
You caught my eye!
You are beautiful like daffodils that grow along the rolling hills!
I’m so in love!
And I don’t think I’ve ever felt this way about anyone but...
You.
And when you’re down, I’ll always be around…to make you smile
When you’re glad, I’ll be there for you too…I’ll stay awhile.
You are beautiful like starlit skies, when your eyes light up like fireflies.
You make me smile!
You are beautiful like an autumn breeze blows gently through the changing leaves.
Please stay awhile!
I’ll be there for your moments of success,
and I’ll be there through the failures and the stress.
I want you to know that I am here for you,
No matter what it puts me through.
(repeat x1)
And when you’re old, I’ll still be there for you…through all the years.
You are beautiful like evergreens, riverbeds, and rocky streams!
You caught my eye!
You are beautiful like daffodils that grow along the rolling hills!
I’m so in love!
And I don’t think I’ve ever felt this way about anyone but...
You.
And when you’re down, I’ll always be around…to make you smile
When you’re glad, I’ll be there for you too…I’ll stay awhile.
You are beautiful like starlit skies, when your eyes light up like fireflies.
You make me smile!
You are beautiful like an autumn breeze blows gently through the changing leaves.
Please stay awhile!
I’ll be there for your moments of success,
and I’ll be there through the failures and the stress.
I want you to know that I am here for you,
No matter what it puts me through.
(repeat x1)
Published 19th Jan 2019
Author's Note
The only song I've ever written... meant to be accompanied by guitar, but I can't play the part, heh. I hope even without an audio clip, you can still get an idea what it might sound like :)
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Anonymous
- Edited 7th May 2019 00:46am
19th Jan 2019 6:04am
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19th Jan 2019 6:50am
I'll figure it out someday, perhaps... :). Thanks for the encouragement!
19th Jan 2019 8:10am
20th Jan 2019 6:20am
Anonymous
- Edited 16th Jul 2019 12:45pm
19th Jan 2019 9:18am
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20th Jan 2019 6:21am
That means a lot, WhispersWeKeep. Thanks for the continued encouragement and support!
19th Jan 2019 2:09pm
Really lovely piece!👏 i can definitely imagine how it would sound and it sounds fantastic👏
Very wonderfully written!
Very wonderfully written!
20th Jan 2019 6:35am
Thanks a lot, Hunter. That means a lot coming from a poet such as yourself! :)
19th Jan 2019 3:52pm
20th Jan 2019 6:34am
Anonymous
19th Jan 2019 5:12pm
NewB,
What beautiful sentiment, my friend! Hope it's a true story because it doesn't happen enough.
Excellent write, warmed my heart, friend.
MZ.
What beautiful sentiment, my friend! Hope it's a true story because it doesn't happen enough.
Excellent write, warmed my heart, friend.
MZ.
20th Jan 2019 6:26am
Hi Matthew! I am touched that my song spoke to you in such a way. Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving your feedback! :)
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Feb 2019 11:45am
20th Jan 2019 7:16pm
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20th Jan 2019 8:42pm
I am glad that you think so :). I appreciate your stopping by again, Orenda!
22nd Jan 2019 1:22am
22nd Jan 2019 2:16am
Aww, thanks for stopping by again, Nourish. I'm glad that you could feel the emotions that I intended to portray :)
22nd Jan 2019 11:04am
Becuz I’m of the mindset, writing to that inner song inside, it’s easy for me to ‘hear’ this song n it’s pretty sweet!
22nd Jan 2019 12:08pm
I'd love to hear what you envision, because our versions of the song would inevitably be different.
Thanks so much for taking the time read and comment, Poetikmind!
Thanks so much for taking the time read and comment, Poetikmind!
25th Jan 2019 8:28am
25th Jan 2019 4:34pm
I'm glad that these feelings could be relayed through my words! When I wrote this, I was definitely feeling the warmth of love. Thanks for the kindness and time, Burglar!
25th Jan 2019 9:17pm
Beautifully captured
And written so smoothly
I feel a new beginning of nature
And written so smoothly
I feel a new beginning of nature
26th Jan 2019 3:26am
31st Jan 2019 7:28pm
As a lover of all things nature; this one touched me so. How beautiful to describe her with the most breathtaking things on Earth. Simply art itself!!
2nd Feb 2019 4:44am
Thanks Pandora! That's a really good compliment. You are sweet :). We have at least one thing in common, heh. I appreciate you stopping by!
2nd Feb 2019 2:48pm
Do you think that I can try to create a song for this lyrics? Or is there already one?
3rd Feb 2019 1:11am
You're welcome to play around with this melody. I'd hate to stunt someone else's inspiration due to my own selfishness. Just make sure to give me credit if you decide to post it somewhere - oh, and I want to hear it when you're done :P
5th Feb 2019 3:20pm
Beautiful lyric poem NB. Sweet and romantic full of love.
" you are beautiful like starlit skies
When your eyes light up like fireflies
You make me smile"
Loved it.
" you are beautiful like starlit skies
When your eyes light up like fireflies
You make me smile"
Loved it.
6th Feb 2019 2:48am
Thanks so much, summer! You always give me really great feedback. I truly appreciate that :)
6th Feb 2019 3:03am
22nd Jan 2020 6:18pm
I can absolutely hear this song while I sing it in my head. It's written perfectly for a guitar piece like you mentioned, although I don't play guitar either!
