deepundergroundpoetry.com
I Dreamed I Grew Horns
I find myself there again and again
Back to nights we thought the stars might send a feeling
Different to the ones that clawed our throats open
So close to us, we thought we’d become them
But the stars, so far, so old and wise
Would see us through the monster times
As we hid, hearts like firecrackers in our chests,
As we weeped for who we used to be
We modeled ourselves after the gods in the sky
We became what we seeked.
I still go back there, time and again
My old home with the floorboards pulled up from the hurricane
Wishing for a glimmer in time of us young and laughing
I’d tell us that it is the time to break rules
You only face juvenile incarceration
And the only real ghosts are the ones in your head
Back to nights we thought the stars might send a feeling
Different to the ones that clawed our throats open
So close to us, we thought we’d become them
But the stars, so far, so old and wise
Would see us through the monster times
As we hid, hearts like firecrackers in our chests,
As we weeped for who we used to be
We modeled ourselves after the gods in the sky
We became what we seeked.
I still go back there, time and again
My old home with the floorboards pulled up from the hurricane
Wishing for a glimmer in time of us young and laughing
I’d tell us that it is the time to break rules
You only face juvenile incarceration
And the only real ghosts are the ones in your head
Author's Note
Sometimes I think we're meant to fall into the same cycle until we break out of it. Choosing to break from what I know gradually. A 10 step program involving writing and a new philosophy :)
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 9
reading list entries 4
comments 14
reads 547
Commenting Preference:
The author is looking for friendly feedback.
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
12th Jan 2019 6:42pm
Great debut poem! Flowed nicely
"Back to nights we thought the stars might send a feeling
Different to the ones that clawed our throats open" That was my favourite line excellent choice of words beautifully dark.
I agree with what you said in your notes about falling into the same cycle until we break out of it. Looking forward to reading more from you.
"Back to nights we thought the stars might send a feeling
Different to the ones that clawed our throats open" That was my favourite line excellent choice of words beautifully dark.
I agree with what you said in your notes about falling into the same cycle until we break out of it. Looking forward to reading more from you.
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
12th Jan 2019 7:10pm
Thank you so much Burning Crow! I'm so glad you liked it and I look forward to reading your writing.
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
12th Jan 2019 7:23pm
Love it. it breathes of childhood homestead revisited, haunting memories, and that infinite feeling of paradox of who we use to be, who we are, and what we aspire to be. I imagine the beach and that place where the skyline meets the ocean into nowhere and everywhere. well penned piece Tabitha_june.
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
12th Jan 2019 7:47pm
Thank you so much, Samael! I'm glad I was able to communicate it clearly. I really appreciate your comment, I'm not very confident in my writing but I'm so happy you liked it. And I love the images you brought up because I felt them too :)
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
Well it's a fantastic philosophy, and one I have no doubt writing will deliver you from. I believe you have a gift of expression emanating from a genuine place inside you.
Welcome to the Deep Side.
Welcome to the Deep Side.
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
12th Jan 2019 10:15pm
Thank you Ahavati! It certainly does come from the heart but to hear I have a gift...thank you so much. I'm happy to be here, and I can't wait to read more of your writing. :)
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
15th Jan 2019 3:36pm
I loved the flashback in this. I agree with you life is about lessons. At least that's my philosophy, either you learn them and move on or you repeat them. But here's the key that I think most miss and you maybe in agreement. Lessons dont always come the same way. The universe sends them in different ways each time. But its the same lessons! If you find yourself in the same patterns, you've missed something! And when it comes back around SEE IT! FIX IT and life will change and you will move on people!!!
Sorry for the little rant! But I like to see like minds working out life through poetry! It helps me work out my universal ideas and theories! I looked forward to reading you...
Sorry for the little rant! But I like to see like minds working out life through poetry! It helps me work out my universal ideas and theories! I looked forward to reading you...
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
15th Jan 2019 5:58pm
I loved the rant. I completely agree and I needed the reminder about spotting unhealthy patterns and nipping them in the bud. There's so much to pay attention to in life that some of them have been slipping by me. Actually learning a lesson and changing my life is what'll bring more fulfillment so I have to get on it. Thank you for reading the poem and I look forward to reading more from you too.
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
20th Apr 2019 3:11am
I like the ambiguity in this (and your other poems) - a string of images connected by a thread, what the reader can sense is something very specific to you, but only hinted at. Reading this, I feel suspended without ground or ceiling, floating in something universal.
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
20th Apr 2019 3:53am
This is such a cool observation! It's hard to view my own poem objectively and I love the way you described this. I'm also relieved that it feels like it's floating in something universal because sometimes I wonder if what I write is too connected to me and not enough to the collective consciousness. Thank you for reading; I'm honored that you reached out about something I've written because I really admire the poems you've published on here.
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
20th Apr 2019 3:56am
I think the very personal can also be universal. An "I" others can step into as well.
Thank you!
Thank you!
1
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
20th Apr 2019 4:53am
I fell in love with these lines:
"I still go back there, time and again
My old home with the floorboards pulled up from the hurricane
Wishing for a glimmer in time of us young and laughing"
I read one of your comments about not being confident in your writing but you absolutely should be because this is a beautiful poem with a lot of depth. I look forward to seeing what you'll be posting x
"I still go back there, time and again
My old home with the floorboards pulled up from the hurricane
Wishing for a glimmer in time of us young and laughing"
I read one of your comments about not being confident in your writing but you absolutely should be because this is a beautiful poem with a lot of depth. I look forward to seeing what you'll be posting x
1
Re: Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
20th Apr 2019 5:07am
Aw thank you! I'm definitely gathering confidence in my writing and I'm enjoying practicing :) You are so sweet to read and comment on my poems and you seriously made my night. I can't wait to read more of what you've written! I love your poet voice xx
Re. I Dreamed I Grew Horns
7th Jun 2019 11:17pm
I live with ghosts in my head, you have a amazing talent, I bow to your words
1