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dead reckoning
water rose, full, dark river,
my thoughts, seeds, perfect,
in skirts of a dozen pockets.
grappling trees and branches
all around,
tenderly arranging night.
something so small,
at least the moths
who took me, heard.
with insects, breathing fire,
do their work
among stone kingdom’s birds.
morning light vanished,
‘times ‘thought
I fell into darkness.
the lichens, white, luminous,
as earth, back before,
they remembered her doom.
better if she had slept
on nothing, never floated by,
bed between stars.
my thoughts, seeds, perfect,
in skirts of a dozen pockets.
grappling trees and branches
all around,
tenderly arranging night.
something so small,
at least the moths
who took me, heard.
with insects, breathing fire,
do their work
among stone kingdom’s birds.
morning light vanished,
‘times ‘thought
I fell into darkness.
the lichens, white, luminous,
as earth, back before,
they remembered her doom.
better if she had slept
on nothing, never floated by,
bed between stars.
Written by
Hepcat61
(geoff cat)
Published 11th Jan 2019
| Edited 12th Jan 2019
Author's Note
for the Poetic Medic #2 competition.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. dead reckoning
Omgosh, it was sweet, being able to read ours to each other! You’ll have a good day at work now I bet!
( more to come, I shall return )
Jadey
( more to come, I shall return )
Jadey
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:16pm
As I recall I did have a good day at work. I apologize for the delay in response. I think, once I had twisted my brain enough in completing the 80 word madness and entered it , I just wanted to not think about it for a while.
thanks for the trilogy!
thanks for the trilogy!
Re. dead reckoning
11th Jan 2019 4:57pm
Excellent entry, Hepcat. Thank you so much for braving this difficult challenge.
Best of luck in the comp.
Best of luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:17pm
Thank you and Johnny for the contest and, ultimately, the trophy...
still in shock!
geoff
still in shock!
geoff
Re. dead reckoning
11th Jan 2019 7:41pm
Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:19pm
deeply appreciated - sorry for the delay, as I stated to Jade above, it was such a brain bender I think once it was published and in the comp - I just wanted to stop thinking about it.
and thanks for the RL
geoff
and thanks for the RL
geoff
Re. dead reckoning
11th Jan 2019 11:20pm
That's another pretty cool entry on this comp - amazing variety. Nice approach.
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:22pm
thank you so much - I won't say it was fun - but it was gratifying to complete the challenge.
geoff
geoff
Re. dead reckoning
12th Jan 2019 4:01am
beautiful.
all the entries are so great next to each other. language is awesome in its 100x combinations.
all the entries are so great next to each other. language is awesome in its 100x combinations.
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:24pm
Thank you so much - I feel neglectful at not responding sooner. But the challenge bent my brain. I had to leave it for a while.
thanks again for your kind words and the read.
geoff
thanks again for your kind words and the read.
geoff
Re. dead reckoning
Anonymous
13th Jan 2019 3:37pm
Great entry, Hepcat. Thank you for diving into the comp's waters above your head.
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:26pm
Thank you, Johnny: I am honored, humbled, and it shock! What a challenge and I am very pleased with what I was able to accomplish with it.
geoff
geoff
Re. dead reckoning
3rd Feb 2019 4:52pm
Tommyyyy...
I said I would return! *squwweeee!!*
Congratulations, Mr Tomcat #26!!
*pounces*💋
I said I would return! *squwweeee!!*
Congratulations, Mr Tomcat #26!!
*pounces*💋
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Re: Re. dead reckoning
5th Feb 2019 2:21pm
It was so great that you alerted me to the news of the trophy!
so glad we could share the excitement!
tomcat
so glad we could share the excitement!
tomcat