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breathe
I fear your proximity
standing too close to my heart
I lose my breath
you catch it on exhale
capture it in a vial
my soul is next to your bosom
in perfect suspended animation
my heart freezes
then resumes with its beating
when you smile
it keeps perfect rhythm
with the sway of your hips
mesmerizing me
captivating me
I lose hold on reality
I fall into the delusion
where there could be a you and I
you look my way
my breath escapes me
caught between a moan and a sigh
skyscraping with my intentions
to just have a taste
a seductive blending
of your honey and mine
kisses to my soul
from a lover like you
I'm brought to my knees
hungering for you
lady love in motion
this is a deep seduction
I fear your proximity
you're standing too near
kiss me then leave me alone
before I crumble
catch my breath and keep it
a keepsake of when
you were worshipped by me
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 10th Jan 2019
| Edited 11th Jan 2019
Author's Note
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Re. breathe
10th Jan 2019 11:05pm
Very sensual passionate lustful imagery my dearest Brenda...💐
Beautiful depth of desire and craving of one woman for another...😊
Love all of it for the opening your thoughts for another...🌹
Love Thomas🐺💕
Beautiful depth of desire and craving of one woman for another...😊
Love all of it for the opening your thoughts for another...🌹
Love Thomas🐺💕
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Re: Re. breathe
10th Jan 2019 11:08pm
thank you graciously dearest Thomas while this remains just a fantasy I am still deeply inspired to share the dream...
I'm so happy you liked it...
love Brenda 💕
I'm so happy you liked it...
love Brenda 💕
Re: Re. breathe
Dearest Brenda...💐
Thank you for sharing your fantasy dream with us in your lovely ink...🌺😊
I pray some day for your dream to come true with all the passion sensuality and love you wish it to be...🙏💗
I loved it my inspiring dearest Brenda...💕
love Thomas 💕🐺
Thank you for sharing your fantasy dream with us in your lovely ink...🌺😊
I pray some day for your dream to come true with all the passion sensuality and love you wish it to be...🙏💗
I loved it my inspiring dearest Brenda...💕
love Thomas 💕🐺
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2019 11:50pm
Crimmy,
That's so good. Brilliant, my friend. Honestly, I think that is one of your finest craftiest pieces. The flow is tremendous, and it's so intense. Excellent work!
Love,
Matthew.
That's so good. Brilliant, my friend. Honestly, I think that is one of your finest craftiest pieces. The flow is tremendous, and it's so intense. Excellent work!
Love,
Matthew.
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Re: Re. breathe
10th Jan 2019 11:51pm
thank you graciously dearest Matthew a beautiful lady deeply inspired me...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2019 11:55pm
Great writing, Crimmy. I wish I could do that.
Love,
Matthew.
Love,
Matthew.
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10th Jan 2019 11:56pm
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2019 11:59pm
Thank you, sweet one. You're one of a kind. So beautiful.
Love,
Matthew.
Love,
Matthew.
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Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 00:39am
A world in a glimpse.....full circle......as if fast forwarding to the credits, as they say.
After all, what's a little total destruction between friends?
Sometimes arranging the chairs on the deck of the Titanic is worth it. What else is there to write about?
After all, what's a little total destruction between friends?
Sometimes arranging the chairs on the deck of the Titanic is worth it. What else is there to write about?
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Re: Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 00:43am
you're right of course dearest RT the fear is from the start predicting the ending... there will be no destruction between friends though...as this is pure fantasy with the exception of my fear of getting too close to people...
thank you for your deep insight...
love Brenda 💕
thank you for your deep insight...
love Brenda 💕
Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 3:07am
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11th Jan 2019 3:08am
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11th Jan 2019 1:42pm
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Re: Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 2:39pm
you know it's strange I was listening to the link you sent me yesterday when I started this poem then this song came on next and it was talking about the taking of breath like I was it tripped me out...
I'm happy you dig the song
I finished writing this poem to the rhythm of it
I felt they were somehow cosmically connected
too big of a coincidence...
love Brenda 💕
I'm happy you dig the song
I finished writing this poem to the rhythm of it
I felt they were somehow cosmically connected
too big of a coincidence...
love Brenda 💕
Re: Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 2:42pm
I was listening to fear of water when I started this poem remember you sent it to me ❤
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Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 10:45am
Love the music and the emotional turmoil in your write Brenda. Quite beautiful. David x
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Re: Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 1:42pm
thank you graciously dearest David I hope you come back to us you will be missed...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
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Anonymous
11th Jan 2019 11:25am
Emotionally drawn in! Fantastic craft here, lovely Brenda.
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11th Jan 2019 1:43pm
Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 6:14pm
Written with such passion. There are so many layers to your personality.
Dark Sun.
Dark Sun.
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Re: Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 6:15pm
thank you graciously dearest Dark Sun for feeling the depths of this write...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. breathe
11th Jan 2019 10:06pm
I'm thoroughly seduced by this poem. It leaves me breathless, and deeply impressed. I particularly love that last stanza.
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Re. breathe
22nd Feb 2019 00:10am