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Every pair of eyes
In ancient lands and isolated villages,
in makeshift watercrafts
in the company of warlocks
and medicine men
and seductive shamans
spreading secrets.
In temples and halfway houses,
in prisons and poetry books,
in photos taken in the past
of people who didn't last,
I recognize...
one soul behind every pair of eyes.
And in wheelchairs behind window frames,
behind steering wheels and silent pains,
in family feuds and friendly fiascos,
in primitive solitude fishing with barbasco,
in court rooms and homeless shelters,
in award winning movie scenes
depicting machines murdering men,
in hospital beds and in gangs of skinheads wearing ugly threads,
even the buzzkilling, overprotective feds
I recognize...
one soul in every pair of eyes.
And here, from where I stand
upon this cloud
I'm floating far from the fear.
I turn around,
I see the secret,
I forget regret,
So nearly free.
And I hear songs of long forgotten dreams,
I sense waves of time crashing, flowing with the stream,
I recognize...
the love that lingers in our eyes.
Written by
Hunterapsych
(Shaman among machines)
Published 3rd Jan 2019
Author's Note
"Strangers passing in the street
By chance two separate glances meet
And I am you and what I see is me" - Roger Waters
By chance two separate glances meet
And I am you and what I see is me" - Roger Waters
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Re. Every pair of eyes
Cohesive, sweet cadence. Lovely world traveling. Thank you.
One correction, I suggest looking at the capitalizations at the beginning of your line breaks, some inconsistency there.
I particularly liked -
"And in wheelchairs behind window frames,
behind steering wheels and silent pains,
In family feuds and friendly fiascos,
In primitive solitude fishing with barbasco,
In court rooms and homeless shelters...."
I like the specificity of some of those scenes.
One correction, I suggest looking at the capitalizations at the beginning of your line breaks, some inconsistency there.
I particularly liked -
"And in wheelchairs behind window frames,
behind steering wheels and silent pains,
In family feuds and friendly fiascos,
In primitive solitude fishing with barbasco,
In court rooms and homeless shelters...."
I like the specificity of some of those scenes.
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 1:45am
Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 3:31am
Thank you very much Haley!
Your kind words are appreciated as is your correction
Thank you!🙏
Your kind words are appreciated as is your correction
Thank you!🙏
Re. Every pair of eyes
I absolutely loved this content, Hunter. I was taken back to my tribal Cherokee roots - and the rituals observed around the Great Spirit. It's a drumbeat of truth the resonates with every person of equal vibration and frequency.
The paradigm is shifting toward Love.
I'm going to take a good look at this regarding critique. There are some places that could use work to hone the rhythmic thump of that drum into a more hypnotic state of consciousness.
You have such a beautiful mind.
The paradigm is shifting toward Love.
I'm going to take a good look at this regarding critique. There are some places that could use work to hone the rhythmic thump of that drum into a more hypnotic state of consciousness.
You have such a beautiful mind.
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 3:34am
Thank you so much Ahavati for taking time to read and comment!
Im glad you liked this one🙏
Your beautiful kind words are very appreciated🙏
Im glad you liked this one🙏
Your beautiful kind words are very appreciated🙏
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3rd Jan 2019 5:57am
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 2:46pm
Thank you so very much Bryan🙏
Appreciate you taking time to read and comment with such kindness🙏
Appreciate you taking time to read and comment with such kindness🙏
Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 11:29am
A progressive rock poetic groove...interesting shifting time and perspective line...
bravo
Jeff
bravo
Jeff
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 2:47pm
Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 1:24pm
I love it! Every human is different, and we sometimes find it hard to remember that beneath all those differences we have a shared characteristic - the soul that makes us human.
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 2:49pm
Yess different faces same soul
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Your kindness is appreciated🙏
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Your kindness is appreciated🙏
Re. Every pair of eyes
Anonymous
3rd Jan 2019 2:14pm
From beginning to end, this was a thing of beauty. Absolutely
...Willow
...Willow
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 2:50pm
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 9:02pm
Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 10:39pm
I would call this poem the evolution of your continual efforts, a real breakthrough. You really capture our communal spirit in this captivating tour of humanity. Wonderful work Hunter.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. Every pair of eyes
3rd Jan 2019 11:07pm