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Quatern Nr.01 — Last Sunday In October
The supermarket closed at 8pm
and I arrived in time at quarter-to
I rushed about to buy the food and then
recycled stuff, and duly off I zoomed
Forgot the milk and cursed - I turned around
the supermarket closed at 8pm
some milk of course was very quickly found
I slammed the door and off I zoomed again
And minutes down the road I lost my zen -
she’d wanted eggs to bake a birthday cake
the supermarket closed at 8pm
I spun the car, thought jeez, for heaven’s sake!
Arriving back, already ten past eight
was puzzled by the shoppers shopping when
I got “the clock’s gone back”, I wasn’t late
the supermarket closed at 8pm.
and I arrived in time at quarter-to
I rushed about to buy the food and then
recycled stuff, and duly off I zoomed
Forgot the milk and cursed - I turned around
the supermarket closed at 8pm
some milk of course was very quickly found
I slammed the door and off I zoomed again
And minutes down the road I lost my zen -
she’d wanted eggs to bake a birthday cake
the supermarket closed at 8pm
I spun the car, thought jeez, for heaven’s sake!
Arriving back, already ten past eight
was puzzled by the shoppers shopping when
I got “the clock’s gone back”, I wasn’t late
the supermarket closed at 8pm.
Published 28th Oct 2018
| Edited 8th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Comp entry for "Levity, Brevity and Nonsense" hosted by Ely.
Quatern Nr.02 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/325887-firing-squad-a-quatern/
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Quatern Nr.02 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/325887-firing-squad-a-quatern/
(photo credit: markus-spiske-wL7pwimB78Q-unsplash)
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28th Oct 2018 6:53pm
A really fun quatern, Josh. Shopping can be hell, particularly on a deadline.
"And minutes down the road I lost my zen -"
You found it here. Great job!
"And minutes down the road I lost my zen -"
You found it here. Great job!
28th Oct 2018 9:16pm
Thank you Crowfly for your enthusiasm! I read that the clocks going back today might be the last time because the EU wants to stop this twice-yearly 1-hour change each Autumn and Spring. So it might have been my last chance to 'have my say' whilst it was still a common experience. :))
28th Oct 2018 8:21pm
Top form ... if I could get past my envy I would send you my praise. (Just kidding - really enjoyed following your refrain travel through the stanzas).
28th Oct 2018 9:19pm
Thank you AB, I like forms where one line keeps on moving through a poem; and also the Terza Rima where the middle line in each (3-line) stanza becomes the third line in the next stanza. It gives poems a kind of rolling momentum.
This is delightful, Josh. Is this your first Quatern? I don’t recall.
Either way, you know how I am about the form, and I know if someone's done it right. So there’s a plus right there. But most of all,...
I enjoy what your piece is about. And congrats on the entry, I don’t need to wish you luck - it’s obvious the winner’s already picked - and I can’t blame her.
😉👍
Either way, you know how I am about the form, and I know if someone's done it right. So there’s a plus right there. But most of all,...
I enjoy what your piece is about. And congrats on the entry, I don’t need to wish you luck - it’s obvious the winner’s already picked - and I can’t blame her.
😉👍
How nice to catch the attention of the Queen of Quaterns, and with such a favourable assessment too, plus RL. Yes, I think it is my first attempt at this form. :))
I've always liked the clocks going back
and springing forward,
like we could do what we liked with time ..
and springing forward,
like we could do what we liked with time ..
29th Oct 2018 1:05pm
Thanks Paul ... see my reply to Crowfly above. The Guardian reported the EU is consideration stopping this twice-yearly change of the clock. Another proposal to get everybody wound up.
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29th Oct 2018 7:01am
Very clever and fun write Josh :)
Not familiar with the style but really enjoyed.
Then I saw your comment on the possible stop of changing the clocks - seems crazy :/
Not familiar with the style but really enjoyed.
Then I saw your comment on the possible stop of changing the clocks - seems crazy :/
29th Oct 2018 1:07pm
Thank you for reading, Sophie. Not sure if the EU proposal will come about or not but looks like it's a possibility.
29th Oct 2018 10:08pm
A fun read .. and relatable .. best of luck in the comp.. we fall back this weekend .. I dont much care for it .. interesting that you might do away with it ...
30th Oct 2018 11:54am
Thank you Jemac for reading, and for the RL. Never knew that Stateside did the same thing with Summer/Winter clocks.
