Reading my favorite erotic female

"Cleaning  
my piss stains with chlorine bleach”  
Literally thought I might piss myself when I read this.

Not sure I can take it seriously but to try and honour your request for honest critique I felt it could maybe do with drawing on ones senses more to demand certain immediacy…

There’s no denying your reverence of this lady though :)

Thanks for reading

Wow just wow

I had a hard time getting past "Cleaning  
my piss stains with chlorine bleach" it left a taste in my mouth that had my jaw dropping. Your admiration has no bounds.
An ode I will not soon forget

Thanks guys  
 
Well the poetry has to come from the heart  
   
I like to write raw and realness  
   
This poem came about    
Me finishing taking a piss  
While leaking a couple of piss spots  
   
And cleaning it with bleach  
Before my girlfriend finds it filthy
She likes to bitch and complain  
About piss stains on the floor  
   
She hates when I leave the toilet seat up  
   
So while through all this cleaning process  
   
I was reading some popular erotic poems  
   
So this poem    
came about feelings for a hot girl while cleaning piss at the same time  
   
Real life poetry  
   
Amen

stay on after her yoga class
let others all pass
then she will show
what u wanna
ask her
she is gentle
yogin omni

Funnyman again