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Hunk
I watched some
Mature
Hunk
Of woman
Falling
For an old*
Slick hair bun/
Gliding hunger/
Weakening eyes/
Cleft chin/
Distended
Temperament/
Pouty lipped/
Anemic/
Pick up line.*
(Aging just
The same).
Mature
Hunk
Of woman
Falling
For an old*
Slick hair bun/
Gliding hunger/
Weakening eyes/
Cleft chin/
Distended
Temperament/
Pouty lipped/
Anemic/
Pick up line.*
(Aging just
The same).
Published 13th Oct 2018
| Edited 15th Oct 2018
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13th Oct 2018 1:44pm
Great cadence with this one ... it flows so well ... "anemic" ... just perfect ... bravo Nari ...
13th Oct 2018 3:18pm
help me lovely one I read the pickup line disfavorable to you...you know being anemic and all...
13th Oct 2018 3:20pm
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13th Oct 2018 4:09pm
yep. the vanity edits should make it more clear because just as you had that trip up in my writing...some one else would have too...thank you for 2nd pair of eyes.
13th Oct 2018 4:11pm
so beautiful dearest Nari and so very sharp...I'm glad I helped... with my misunderstanding...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
13th Oct 2018 3:25pm
it's really neat the way you're able to paint a vivid image using so few words. very concise, i like this.
13th Oct 2018 3:54pm
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