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My Bones Weren't Made for This
It's the weight of fear that pulls
Pulls you down so far
A black abyss
Endless
These growing bones of childhood
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of love that drags
Drags you beneath the waves
Rushing waves
I'm powerless
These young bones of merging adulthood
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of this life that settles
Settles deep in you veins like coal trains
Souless
These aging bones of mine
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of everything that
Pushes on my shoulders hard
Hard as gold lined dreams
Helpless
These fragile bones of lace
Weren't made for this
Pulls you down so far
A black abyss
Endless
These growing bones of childhood
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of love that drags
Drags you beneath the waves
Rushing waves
I'm powerless
These young bones of merging adulthood
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of this life that settles
Settles deep in you veins like coal trains
Souless
These aging bones of mine
Weren't made for this
It's the weight of everything that
Pushes on my shoulders hard
Hard as gold lined dreams
Helpless
These fragile bones of lace
Weren't made for this
Published 5th Oct 2018
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Anonymous
5th Oct 2018 9:51pm
The repetition works very well to the poem's advantage.
Stanza 3, Line 2 - you lost an "r" on "your".
You could probably add some suspense by shortening the title to "These Bones".
Stanza 3, Line 2 - you lost an "r" on "your".
You could probably add some suspense by shortening the title to "These Bones".
5th Oct 2018 11:41pm
18th Oct 2018 9:34pm
Ah ... the weight of love ... a powerful gravity ... bravo my poetess ...
