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Tears As Portals To Visions
Compacted in a twinkle of joy
a life-time of searching for the Holy Well
delivered its final beginning ... and
without rushing in to grab my inheritance
I savoured the moment for as long
as time would stretch. Removing the cap
from my pen I wrote down the first of many thirsts
and watched my tears grow into a river.
Published 3rd Oct 2018
| Edited 8th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Entered for "Miracles" comp hosted by AEmelia564.
Title of poem = No:5 on the list.
(photo credit: levi-xu-dOhJtfXJZfw-unsplash)
Title of poem = No:5 on the list.
(photo credit: levi-xu-dOhJtfXJZfw-unsplash)
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4th Oct 2018 00:50am
I like it, Josh... most apropos... for all it's brevity, it says a lot... love how it builds to the conclusion. Kudos... Ely
4th Oct 2018 2:25pm
4th Oct 2018 1:27am
This is poignant in its message, Josh.
One thing, did you mean the form to be prosey?
One thing, did you mean the form to be prosey?
4th Oct 2018 2:29pm
I can't say I meant it to be 'prosey' (which might mean something different in my head than other interpretations). When I write in unstructured form I don't actually have much sense where lies the dividing line between 'prose' and 'poetry'. But it's an interesting question. Thank you.
Good for you . I've been trying to track mine For years. Was told about it. But no luck.....
This is regarding something a family member Of mine left me before they died....
Since those comments were erased
This is regarding something a family member Of mine left me before they died....
Since those comments were erased
4th Oct 2018 2:32pm
Thank you for commenting dizzzzzzy. All I can say is that I didn't meet poetry as "my thing" until I'd turned 50 - and after many false starts. :))
4th Oct 2018 2:59pm
4th Oct 2018 3:18pm
I mean life on earth is a tough assignment. And we journey in it through trial and error. That means we experience many trials and many errors. But eventually something 'clicks'.
4th Oct 2018 7:39am
The idea of tears growing into a river is so beautiful!
I felt drawn to the same title, but nothing came...
You wrote a short, but very powerful poem, bravo!
I felt drawn to the same title, but nothing came...
You wrote a short, but very powerful poem, bravo!
Thank you Duende - that last line was in my head first whenever I thought of my relationship to poetry - and the 'miracle' experience of words popping 'out of nowhere' into one's head - so I had a sense of where it was all heading.
4th Oct 2018 2:56pm
And where would that be?
There's only 1 direction of where it was heading.
Wanting truth....that's it........
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4th Oct 2018 1:33pm
Ahh, this is gorgeous and very strong. Love it!
4th Oct 2018 2:36pm
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4th Oct 2018 3:16pm
Thanks Babajava - the title was given in the comp "instructions" so no credit to me for that - I just kind of followed the thought it provoked in me. :))
24th Oct 2018 10:27pm
I love this, especially ‘the final beginning’.. makes me think of that moment when I first felt connected to something deeper and felt safe... The final beginning, when you’ve grasped something about life that changes your journey for the remainder of life
24th Oct 2018 11:20pm
"the final beginning" - Absolutely my meaning too; you've articulated the experience really well. Thank you for the comment.
