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when your heart wants to cry
inconsolably
finding a place
becomes hard
especially when one is
surrounded by people
all the time
sometimes
you just wanna let it out
let it flow
down the cheeks
on to the chest
the drops
the streams
the screams
finding
that quiet corner
is all what you think of
silence
truly becomes
more dearer
than gold
judging eyes
everywhere
perhaps that
is the reason
sight of the sea
and the crashing waves
that resemble
the tumult inside
offer some solace
solace
that silence
couldn't provide
when you eventually
found it
...
finding a place
becomes hard
especially when one is
surrounded by people
all the time
sometimes
you just wanna let it out
let it flow
down the cheeks
on to the chest
the drops
the streams
the screams
finding
that quiet corner
is all what you think of
silence
truly becomes
more dearer
than gold
judging eyes
everywhere
perhaps that
is the reason
sight of the sea
and the crashing waves
that resemble
the tumult inside
offer some solace
solace
that silence
couldn't provide
when you eventually
found it
...
Author's Note
NOTHING related of present time dear friends...just an observation from life so far.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 1:47pm
Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 1:55pm
better out
than in
i've observed.
in for and about those
the many many
who don't even get a chance
to let it out
welcome
is the wise Friend
welcome
is the Human, generous and kind
much obliged
sis!
than in
i've observed.
in for and about those
the many many
who don't even get a chance
to let it out
welcome
is the wise Friend
welcome
is the Human, generous and kind
much obliged
sis!
Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 4:36pm
Recent or not... this is a deeply moving piece!
We should be grateful for we have poetry :-)
We should be grateful for we have poetry :-)
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
24th Sep 2018 9:50pm
welcome
is the dear friend
welcome
is the kindness and affection.
yes, indeed. Lord only knows what would we do without poetry. Welcome your deep insight too dear Friend!
is the dear friend
welcome
is the kindness and affection.
yes, indeed. Lord only knows what would we do without poetry. Welcome your deep insight too dear Friend!
Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 5:14pm
I feel that one. Have had those moments. You hit it on the head...wanting to be the ocean in wild and unhibited expression....
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
24th Sep 2018 9:53pm
welcome
is the Friend admired
welcome
is the review, kind and insightful.
I bet you have as most humans who are sensitive do, go through these moments. Hope the peace was sooner and longer each time. And yes the ocean...
appreciate immensely
the visit, the feedback.
is the Friend admired
welcome
is the review, kind and insightful.
I bet you have as most humans who are sensitive do, go through these moments. Hope the peace was sooner and longer each time. And yes the ocean...
appreciate immensely
the visit, the feedback.
Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 5:22pm
I have always found the ocean the best place to "tells one's story". She is so vast, deep, and all-encompassing, so present and comforting that no story is 'too much'.
Nice write :)
Nice write :)
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
24th Sep 2018 9:55pm
Welcome
is the poet Admired
Welcome
is the insight deep and captivating.
yes Sir, the best place to "tell one's story" and yes, she's a keeper and yes, no story too much.
welcome your presence
and feedback dear Friend! always!
appreciation
immense
is the poet Admired
Welcome
is the insight deep and captivating.
yes Sir, the best place to "tell one's story" and yes, she's a keeper and yes, no story too much.
welcome your presence
and feedback dear Friend! always!
appreciation
immense
Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 5:44pm
As a water baby I fully relate to this poem as truth.
Because you have requested Honest Critique, I would say this could really be tightened succinctly in many places, thus streamlining the message more clearly. For example, you used 'when' three times, 2 of which are unneeded.
Because you have requested Honest Critique, I would say this could really be tightened succinctly in many places, thus streamlining the message more clearly. For example, you used 'when' three times, 2 of which are unneeded.
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
welcome
is the Artist Admired
Welcome
is the gesture, kind.
Also welcome is the review, generous and helpful. Glad i am dear Poet you could relate.
I am more than happy to welcome your critique dear friend( i have no reason to believe any critique from you would be anything but honest) so please go ahead and feel free to help me out with your light dear Friend!
apologies for the delay in getting back!
:-)
...and also...thank you for the honor of the listing!!
is the Artist Admired
Welcome
is the gesture, kind.
Also welcome is the review, generous and helpful. Glad i am dear Poet you could relate.
I am more than happy to welcome your critique dear friend( i have no reason to believe any critique from you would be anything but honest) so please go ahead and feel free to help me out with your light dear Friend!
apologies for the delay in getting back!
:-)
...and also...thank you for the honor of the listing!!
Re. when your heart wants to cry
22nd Sep 2018 6:28pm
I could use some ocean time right now. Always connects me when I feel disintegrated.
Lovely.
Lovely.
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
25th Sep 2018 00:06am
welcome
is the friend admired
welcome
is the feedback, kind.
hope you do get some ocean time and soon dear peer. glad to know one more soul feels the same connection to the ocean.
appreciate immensely
the visit
the feedback
is the friend admired
welcome
is the feedback, kind.
hope you do get some ocean time and soon dear peer. glad to know one more soul feels the same connection to the ocean.
appreciate immensely
the visit
the feedback
Re. when your heart wants to cry
Anonymous
24th Sep 2018 4:19pm
Awesome, Cold One!
Really know the feeling(too much lately). Oh well.
Greta(that's supposed to be great, so don't give Greta the credit) write!
Matthew.
Really know the feeling(too much lately). Oh well.
Greta(that's supposed to be great, so don't give Greta the credit) write!
Matthew.
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
25th Sep 2018 00:16am
welcome
is the Friend admired
welcome
are the reviews, kindness and laughter
thank You Matt!
sad and sorry to learn you are dealing more than your fair share, with these moments. Hope they vanish and stay away from you.
thank you , beyond words
for everything, Friend!
is the Friend admired
welcome
are the reviews, kindness and laughter
thank You Matt!
sad and sorry to learn you are dealing more than your fair share, with these moments. Hope they vanish and stay away from you.
thank you , beyond words
for everything, Friend!
Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
Anonymous
25th Sep 2018 00:21am
Hey, thanks buddy!!
That's really nice of you to say!
I enjoy your words, and your friendship immensely! Great place here, because sometimes people really pick you up!
You take care, and keep in touch.
MZ.
That's really nice of you to say!
I enjoy your words, and your friendship immensely! Great place here, because sometimes people really pick you up!
You take care, and keep in touch.
MZ.
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
25th Sep 2018 3:53am
Likewise dear friend!
You're a welcome addition
both to the community as well
as my stay here in this place!
Thank You MZ!
:-)
You're a welcome addition
both to the community as well
as my stay here in this place!
Thank You MZ!
:-)
Re. when your heart wants to cry
25th Sep 2018 5:39pm
As with the tides, these times do swell. And when silence offers no solace that one thought it would... you’ve penned the pain well my friend.
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Re: Re. when your heart wants to cry
5th Oct 2018 11:14pm
welcome
is the friend admired.
welcome
is the insight, deep and profound.
welcome also
is the generous and kind appreciation.
yes, these times, do swell my friend.
Appreciation
for all
beyond words
is the friend admired.
welcome
is the insight, deep and profound.
welcome also
is the generous and kind appreciation.
yes, these times, do swell my friend.
Appreciation
for all
beyond words