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Cracker Jack
the night was never so broken
as it was with cracker jacks in its eyes
and me the joker its toy prize
it spin the bottle
landed on the girl who smiled at the moon
you couldn't get a kiss from her
unless you paid her in tar
quick with a trick
she had plenty of surprises up her sleeve
for the man of no particular religion
who store his sin inside her
while she shouted hallelujahs to the crows
picking over her bones...
to see what they could find
a penny for her name...you bet... she sold it
to a man that had none
dime store diva she earned street respect
cold was the day who saw her walk away from the game
she got too old to play
wisened and tired of the regulars
who haunted her dreams
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Re. Cracker Jack
4th Sep 2018 4:39am
I think you’re at your best when you get into a scene-setting mood; this was both ethereal and very street, a black-and-white gamble on a crumbling sidewalk. Loved it; you’re on fire
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Re: Re. Cracker Jack
7th Sep 2018 2:23am
thank you graciously dearest Taurus that means a lot coming from a writer such as you ❤
love Brenda
love Brenda
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7th Sep 2018 2:24am
Re. Cracker Jack
4th Sep 2018 6:32pm
great writing my friend and by walking away you live to tell the story SS
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Re. Cracker Jack
5th Sep 2018 8:25pm
Written by a woman with soul and street smarts. My favorite stanza:
while she shouted hallelujahs to the crows
picking over her bones...
to see what they could find
The addiction and prostitution theme is powerful. This one hit me hard in an enlightening way. Love this, Lady Crim.
while she shouted hallelujahs to the crows
picking over her bones...
to see what they could find
The addiction and prostitution theme is powerful. This one hit me hard in an enlightening way. Love this, Lady Crim.
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Re: Re. Cracker Jack
7th Sep 2018 2:27am
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow I was worried people wouldn't get the metaphors here and you did...
you're deeply appreciated 💕
love Crim
you're deeply appreciated 💕
love Crim
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7th Sep 2018 2:28am
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Anonymous
7th Sep 2018 9:10am
Tragic yet triumphantly rising above is this well written life experience/inspiring write. Good to read you again friend.
Sin
Sin
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7th Sep 2018 10:00am